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A Stunning Performance

Like dancing in a mine field
Feet as sensitive
As the hair in your ears
She pirouettes like rain drops
Hips rebounding like billiard balls
Her body in constant motion
As spellbinding as a hummingbird’s wings
Limbs — bending and unbending —
Like a pump jack
Coaxing oil from the ground
She leaps like water from a fountain
And then centers herself
Like a universe’s star
She’s all the colors and every emotion
Like wind through the curtains
A sledgehammer through walls
Her chest heaves
Like a horse’s back running
Her eyes sparkle
Like pears through the leaves
As I watch, I find my heart thrilling
Like a lark briefly trapped
In a house’s eves

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haha. thanks for the read and the comments, mark.

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