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Step Out The Door (Feb. Contest)

Step out the door to clear the doubt.
You'll learn for sure what life's about.
What's good, what's bad you shall explore,
to clear the doubt, step out the door.

Unlatch the lock, lash out the fear.
find out your way through hope and cheer.
The journey is a joyful walk,
Lash out the fear, unlatch the lock.

Knock hard to learn what, where and why.
Detect the world with naked eye.
It doesn't lie, but helps you gain.
What, where and why, knock hard to learn.

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Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
"Gaining Knowledge" is an alternative title. I thought this might work better for the contest.
Editing stage: 

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Excellent write, all these doors and not one love story yet lol,
Take care Young Lady, Yours Ian..

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Thanks for the lovely comment.

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Have a lovely day out there and may you not have to seek those things you need.
Want for nothing,
Yours Ian

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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
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I love the way you have worked the first and last verses of each stanza
and nice blank verse iambic tetrameter
best of luck in the contest
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Many thanks.
Wish you the same dear.

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I love it too!

thank you

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Yes I agree with above comments - looks like the prize is going to be split at least three ways! :)

love Mand xxx

Appreciate your visit dear!
It's fun what counts, isn't it?

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Absolutely!

I might be wrong but it seems like you are trying to rhyme it, if so, then that last stanza's last 2 lines' ending words are off - "gain" and "learn"

Alid

near rhyme. Fortunately it isn't a sonnet after all.

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I remember having posted a comment on this...dunno where and how it disappeared...anyways it was appreciative...making you a strong contender to win the contest...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

You indeed left a comment under the main thread, Feb. Contest blog.
Thanks for the supportive comment.

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All the contestants seem bent on making judge's job harder and this is no exception......stan

this shines
im basking in it
food bank a man
cursed...'fucking asshole'
wondered if it was I
so I lumbered over to him
he seemed to want to in
a hurry to hop on his electric
three wheeled car...those things
people need when their legs
are done...lungs shot..legs bad
asked him how many batteries
they take..
'many' he mumbled
flipping the lid like he was
working on something
'i have a large hammer...wrench'
which i do..my pedal falls off
stripped nut on bike...
still fumbling...it was the seat
adjustment...
maybe he was cursing the seat
but then a key fell from the latch
aside where he parks his butt
'why thats the key i was looking
for for over a week' suddenly
joy lit his eyes...
'he looked at me'
'it was meant to be'
thank u..he said
but i know he was talking
to the luck

attitude changes everything
but it came from the heart
not the head
nor hands...

a great day..like this poem
beautiful and striking
like sunshine
on a stormy day!

thank U Rula!

W

Really happy with your passing by.
Thank you

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and the comments are such a nice remembrance of Esker.

The message is clear and well presented.

I would just suggest as you have 12 lines in sonnet form, why not add a rhymed couplet to make it a sonnet? The form is most inviting, and I think the poem could use the resolution and vague poetic truth the last lines of a sonnet usually offer. Just a thought.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

the poem was a first or 2nd attempt tothe 'Swap Quatrain" and I was so happy with the result but I really appreciate the thought, it reflects your kind appreciation.
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/swapquatrain.html
Thank you!

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