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Santa's Fantasy...

Submitted by Geezer on Fri, 2010-12-24 14:46

The night is quiet, snow covers the land
Christmas eve is here, right where I stand
The children are all nestled in their warm cozy beds
Visions of presents play in their heads

I sit drinking coffee, laced with white rum
Looking at toys that make me feel dumb
There are dollys pretty and robots that talk
Even dogs that when prompted, on leashes they walk

Computer games, and videos too
There are so many things, that leave nothing to do
Imagination has gone, out the window it seems
Leaving nothing for children, to make of it's schemes

Everything is done for them, nothing to do
I wish that I had, something better for you
Something that makes your small brains expand
A thing that might tell you, how to use your hands

Puzzles, paint-sets, and things to create
No fake guns, bombs and things to sow hate
When we give gifts that kill, we seed what we'll reap
How can you expect, spirits of love to keep?

The day is no longer, what we should keep in our hearts
Only toys and presents, which come in hundreds of parts
No batteries included, no spark of intellect
Only bills for which, they will come to collect

My mind reels with the image, that I might save them yet
Believe me it's tempting, but it's not a safe bet
They would mope and be nasty, they might even turn on me
Those little children, who sat on my knee

So old Santa will give them, what they're all longing for
More video-games, and things of war
After all, they know, where St. Nick lives these days
I'm afraid that they'd come, and my home they would raze

Using their skills, born of practice in hate
I'm sure that they'd grin, as they ponder my fate
My reindeer are stomping, they want to be off
The elves are finished, I can hear toke, pass, and cough

Who can blame them, for celebrating, with a couple of puffs?
The demands of Christmas, have gotten more than enough
I'm drunk, I shouldn't be flying this sleigh
I hope that Rudolph ain't forgotten the way

I might just shave this beard, grab the missus, split town
Turn the reindeer all loose, shed this suit for a clown
They won't start looking, for at least a year of days
I'll be on the beach, soaking up rays

Let them all fend, for themselves this next year
'Cause I'll be in St. Tropez, drinking some beer
Ho, Ho, Ho, Merry Christmas to you
Next year, I'll have something better to do

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Geezer

Sun, 2010-12-26 18:20

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you some Christmas cheer. I was thinking about what all the kids might be in for, if all the adults decided that the kids weren't all that good this year, and just spent the money on a much needed vacation in some tropical island paradise. Sounds fun huh?
Love ya, ~ Gee ~ Happy Holidays!

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Geezer

Sun, 2010-12-26 18:29

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for a cruise to St. Tropez. One of the hooks was: Hey, you've been good all year. Why not treat yourself and the Mrs. to a cruise to St. Tropez? They show white sandy beaches, with a pretty young native girl with a Santa hat on, serving drinks to a couple lying in beach chairs. This is what became of my day-dream! Glad you had a Ho HO HO out of it! Love and hugs, ~ Gee

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Geezer

Wed, 2010-12-29 13:29

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is one of the greatest things one could be gifted with. Mine comes from a long line of practical-joker French-Indian genes on my mom's side, and from the dry, sarcastic wit of the English on my father's side. I saw and enjoyed that film, with Jamie in it. She always seems to impart an innocent, if twisted sense of humour to any part she plays. Happy Holidays, Love ya, ~ Gee

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Geezer

Sun, 2010-12-26 18:43

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the others, the advertisement looked mighty inviting. I was just wondering what it would be like to just chuck all the Christmas gifts for the kids, [ who have been little brats all year, up until a couple of weeks before Christmas ], and take a cruise. I'm sure that Santa has room in his sleigh for a few deserving parents, so I don't see a problem with picking you up on the way. I also took a few little bits from some people in the taxi, who were complaining about all the war-toys, and threw that in too. I hope that you have some lovely holidays, and enjoy your summer, because I'm ready to come and take it back soon. Love and higgest bugs, ~ Gee

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Sat, 2010-12-25 08:40

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I had a few ideas but decided this fun,yet thoughtful, write didn't need them. Merry Christmas..............stanta

Geezer

Sun, 2010-12-26 18:52

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Hope you had a Merry Christmas, and I have the warmest wishes for you and your's New Year. What good are the holidays, if we can't have a little fun? Besides, Santa needs to take some time to recoup, and I'm sure that he will see the error of his ways, while lying there on the beach drinking beer, and he will be back next year. { Don't you think so?} Thanks for the read and comments, and I would be glad to hear your ideas. Maybe we could all band together next year, and get ourselves off to some tropic isle and enjoy Christmas for a change! ~ Geezer [ the unknown reindeer].

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Wed, 2010-12-29 13:14

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one of my favorite lines too! Just because I hate being cold! I would rather be hot and sweaty, than cold and shivering. I did have a good Christmas, hope that yours was too! My thanks go out to you and all the people that thought this was funny, and enjoyed it. Happy New Year to you and yours, ~ Gee

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Xavier Sleuth

Thu, 2021-08-05 11:15

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I like the PoV.
This line's good: "There are so many things, that leave nothing to do"
Last stanza - cherry on top.
Good thoughts.

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Xtremely busy Xponentially becoming Xcellently at Xactly _____

Geezer

Thu, 2021-08-05 12:38

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I can see that this needs a little editing, and I'm sure that I will get around to it someday; maybe around Christmas. LoL
Geez.
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