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RHYME PATTERN 1 WORKSHOP-Les Fleurs Parlent
Lesl Fleurs Parlent
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"look at me" said Magnolia tree
"my flowers big as plates!
the regal rose looked down her nose
said "probably what you ate."
.
The marigolds a rowdy crowd interjected thus
"pretty is as pretty does"
"oh pretty rose you'll rue your words"
"for you'll get snipped, not us."
.
the peonies hung heads so low
way down, as though confused
they should have been supported more
their perfume thus suffused
The shabby daffodils exclaimed
"The crocuses have croaked!"
the wilting tulip looked at them
said "we're next in this game.'
.
"we're all meant to be called "
the elegant iris spoke
"but look at morning glory there
wide open, sun enthralled"
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Structured: Western
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I can not continue this farce. I have no particular favorite poem. I like a lot of stuff, sometimes I have a favorite for a day or so. Sometimes a particular line will haunt me. I never "studied" poetry, read much of the classics, nor do I feel a burning need to. Mea maxima culpa (just in case..)
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Ian.T
Sun, 2012-08-12 14:28
Feign
Will sort out asap, just a little behind with my home work lol.
Take care, talk to you soon,
Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
scribbler
Sun, 2012-08-12 16:38
Hello
Not quite as much rhyme as I had in mind but it Does leave plenty of leeway for change..............stan
Ian.T
Mon, 2012-08-13 03:34
A Change
"look at me" said Magnolia tree
No mistake "Flowers big as plates,!
A regal rose looked down her nose
said "probably something you ate."
Marigolds a rowdy crowd, interjected
"pretty you are, as pretty does"
Pretty rose watch you aren’t neglected"
"For you'll be harvested, not us."
Peonies hung their heads so low
Way down, scattering to the ground
Their perfume suffused, rarely used
Should have been supported not abused
No longer bright daffodils domain
Crocuses croaked till next year its plain
Wilting tulip hangs head looking on
It will be us next, we won’t be long
Iris spoke “This is the way of us all”
Each in their turn will receive the call.
Look at morning glory there, unaware!
Wide open, sun enthralled, no care.
Not sure if I have carried out this exercise in the correct way
no doubt someone will say,
Yours Ian . T . O'day
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
judyanne
Mon, 2012-08-13 05:35
i love the write feign
it's not particularly sing-songy however
i'll be interested in how this one gets re-written
love judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)