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Red Handed

We have blood on our hands Man!!
So much blood on our hands!!

Altruism, Mediocrity, Materialism and Superficiality
Our evolution,
Diving straight into a dark Abyss

Spiritual beings,
Born from sands Of OUR MOTHER EARTH we are
Who forget our roots, our definition.

Where is our intergrity?
Where is our respect?
Instead we turn around and RAPE her,
RAPE the one who has birthed us,
RAPE our Mother and wonder why
"Why the misery and pain God?"

Man!!
We are ungrateful, vicious and dumb as fuck
Stupid mother fuckers we are
With so much blood on our hands!!
Spilling so much blood of the land!!

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A great point of view, and a rage of thoughts.
Blood and guts have been the stepping stones of our world for thousands of years.
Most times run by religious fiends who live in palaces and have never had to eat cake,( not the sort the poor have to eat )
I hear and see it each day here in the UK.
They say that we are the 6th richest country in the world..
Tell that to the ones that have to go to Food Banks to feed their children.
Even to cut costs for those in power, they wrapped 120 buildings in material that burns, in those buildings live the poorer people.
Bad subject for me it makes me angry..
Any building over three stories high should not be used for people to live in, it was proved back in the sixties that they make people ill, and now we know that they are fire traps, how many people do we murder before they are turned into the only practical use for them, OFFICE Blocks.
If man was meant to live that high off the ground he would have bloody long legs.
Thanks for your rant it was good,
Yours Ian..

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the anger that you express myself. I feel sick every time I see a tree in it's prime, cut down to make way for a new building or parking lot. I know that God supposedly said to be fruitful and multiply, but I don't think he meant for us to breed indiscriminately and rape the earth. Nice rant, it felt raw and it is natural. ~ Geezer.
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From the age of 12 when I first protested the Vietnam war, through protests on Moratorium, the ravages of multi-national corporations on the labour movement, child labour and the planet I have seldom rested, though I am tired Now.

Nor have I omitted to take the time to love and care for others, to be transported by the beauty of our planet, to create art and provoke change for the better.

"Altruism... Diving straight into a dark Abyss"? What is wrong with altruism?

Perhaps it is fair you say 'we', so you don't sound self-righteous saying 'you', blaming others. Yet I feel the failure in your argument comes from the line-
"Why the misery and pain God?"
As soon as you introduce a superstition, religion, even by question, you abrogate personal and racial responsibility. Belief in supernatural beings asks them to fix it when it is up to us and no-one else.

I love your passion, your concern, your despair and relate yet what we need to do is use our brains, work out solutions and take action.

"Man!!
We are ungrateful, vicious and dumb as fuck
Stupid mother fuckers we are"
Is not true. This negative, self-defeating belief comes from religion, especially the Ibrahamic religions (Christianity, Islam and Judaism) with their belief in original sin, that humanity is born bad and needs to be saved. It is the most vile, pernicious destructive belief ever perpetrated on humanity. We can be whatever we choose to be.

Humanity has many traits, genetic and environmental. We became a dominant species through co-operation and mutual care. Greed is not a human trait, it is an ideological one engendered by capitalism.

We can care, we can work co-operatively, we can support each other and work collectively to create goodness and save our planet.

Your anger is great, Kahan; don't let it destroy and defeat you. Use it instead as a motivational force for change, to bring us all together.

cheers,
Jess
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