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Reality Of Love

Submitted by Alan Garfoot on Tue, 2023-07-18 13:52

The uniquest hope finally descended,
As reality was so ultimately transcended,
As the realist truth was comprehended,
At the point my world very nearly ended.

For the past is only written in stone,
When we have truly build our home,
And a light is cast upon a future known,
And our realities we truly call our own.

Our destinies my love shall always intertwine,
For our hearts are truly beautifully sublime,
And our intellects uniquely perfectly refined,
With our empathic perfection being so kind.

So where our futures lead I just cannot guess,
But knowing each other we are truly blessed,
So about the uncertainty please do not stress,
Just keep being perfect and i’ll handle the rest.

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Our Reality Comprehended..." explores themes of hope, reality, love, and uncertainty. The overall structure and flow of the poem are well-maintained, and the rhyming scheme adds a sense of musicality to the piece. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be strengthened:

1. Use of clichés: The poem contains several clichés, such as "our hearts are truly beautifully sublime" and "knowing each other we are truly blessed." While clichés can sometimes convey a familiar sentiment, they can also weaken the impact of the poem and make it feel less original. Consider replacing these clichés with more unique and specific language to enhance the poem's individuality.

2. Vague language: Some phrases in the poem, such as "the uniquest hope" and "our empathic perfection," are quite abstract and lack specific details. To make the poem more engaging and relatable, try incorporating concrete imagery or specific examples that help to

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