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PRIMAL STALK (November contest)

The hunt begins
for hunger gnaws
while the mainspring slowly spins
and the stalker gives no pause.

Sun sinks slowly in the west,
fellow carnivores join in the fray
each hoping they can pass the test
of filling belly at the end of day.

Many targets are passed by
in the quest for the right one.
This hunter is choosy, sly.
His prey when found will soon be done.

And there it is, just off the path,
no idea what is to come.
Quick turn, predetermined aftermath.
The quarry already beyond numb.
I, the hunter, magically
turn into a KFC.

*KFC is a fast food chicken restaurant chain

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Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Yes you had me hooked, waiting for a gory ending. Better to end this way LOL. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Glad you liked the twist at the end lol......stan

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good one Stan but had expected more fun than the end line...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

For some reason I just couldn't come up with anything worthy of an out loud laugh so I settled on maybe getting folks to smile

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Yeah it's not laugh out loud funny but maybe at least smile worthy which is all that's required of the contest. Appreciate your honesty and ideas

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When it comes to contest I can only post for fun because I'm a bit ineligible to win lol. BTW I'm about to start up an implied imagery shop if you'd like to join in.

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I thought this was awesome. KFC lol on the hunt for KFC

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All the poor chickens lol. Good to see you dropped in

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Im a vegan so the chicken safe from me lol

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We each have our own choice for diet.........or perhaps you are finally admitting you came from the star Vega lol

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you said it

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Carolina girl

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Hi Stan, I'm enjoying this one immensely. The end rhymes and spacing are all perfect. You did make me smile with your ending, I also thought it would be gory...lol.
We have no KFC in Argentina, but reading the comments I now understand. No nits at all, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

I appreciate you dropping by on this oldie written by an oldie lol

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I wasn't expecting that! KFC how delicious, in my neck of the woods there's one but I would have to drive 1hour 30 minutes to get there. Stan you're a tease!

Ps, round my way they have made a film from a civilian car of wolves just wondering up close, right in my home town.

Thank you...Teddy

Two legged or four legged?

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Four legged, this year we don't miss anything, from covid to a wolf or two hanging out. I don't fancy walking in the forests at the moment, hey maybe I'll get a red coat and hood for Xmas.

Thank you...Teddy

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