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POINT OF VIEW

You see a junkie, I see
Low self-esteem.
You see a problem, I see someone
Swimming against the stream.

You see a cocaine fiend, I see
Pain and fear.
You see an inmate, I see
A bum-steer.

You see an alcoholic, I see
Social-anxiety.
You see a loser, I see
Future sobriety.

You see an addict, I see
Someone's child.
You see a disgrace, I see someone
Whose problems compiled.

You see a prostitute, I see someone
Caught in addiction.
You see a jail bird, I see
Their conviction.

You see a self-centered person,
I see the disease.
You see death,
I see someone ill at ease.

You see a pill head,
I see someone in pain.
You see no hope, I see
Someone caught in the rain.

You see a lost cause, I see
A willingness to change.
You see someone evil, I see
The exchange.

You see denial, I see
Someone willing to try.
You see them in hell, I see
A person reaching for the sky.

You see a dope-fiend, I see
A new soul.
You see a creature, I see the
Way out of the hole.

You see a lost person,
I see their heart.
You see the end,
I see a new start.

Turbo1904 ♥

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Structured: Western
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

I don't think we have met before, I could be wrong. I very much like your poem and attitude on life. most excellent!!! my favorite lines are:

You see a pill head,
I see someone in pain.
You see no hope, I see
Someone caught in the rain.

You see a lost cause, I see
A willingness to change.
You see someone evil, I see
The exchange.

I look forward to reading more of your poetry in the future.

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Thank you, Cat, for the review and the pleasant things you said. I can tell we will get along just fine. I started jotting down little things. Out of scribble came some poetry. I have written a couple hundred poems. I write how I feel, react, I write my take on whatever topic it is. Thanks again Miss Cat.

Best Wishes,
Turbo1904

author comment

any criticisms for this one on the form or the style. ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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I know it can be difficult to maintain a 2nd and 3rd line rhyme so doing so on this long of a poem is commendable

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