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POINT OF VIEW
You see a junkie, I see
Low self-esteem.
You see a problem, I see someone
Swimming against the stream.
You see a cocaine fiend, I see
Pain and fear.
You see an inmate, I see
A bum-steer.
You see an alcoholic, I see
Social-anxiety.
You see a loser, I see
Future sobriety.
You see an addict, I see
Someone's child.
You see a disgrace, I see someone
Whose problems compiled.
You see a prostitute, I see someone
Caught in addiction.
You see a jail bird, I see
Their conviction.
You see a self-centered person,
I see the disease.
You see death,
I see someone ill at ease.
You see a pill head,
I see someone in pain.
You see no hope, I see
Someone caught in the rain.
You see a lost cause, I see
A willingness to change.
You see someone evil, I see
The exchange.
You see denial, I see
Someone willing to try.
You see them in hell, I see
A person reaching for the sky.
You see a dope-fiend, I see
A new soul.
You see a creature, I see the
Way out of the hole.
You see a lost person,
I see their heart.
You see the end,
I see a new start.
Turbo1904 ♥
Comments
Candlewitch
Mon, 2022-05-23 12:29
hello turbo,
I don't think we have met before, I could be wrong. I very much like your poem and attitude on life. most excellent!!! my favorite lines are:
You see a pill head,
I see someone in pain.
You see no hope, I see
Someone caught in the rain.
You see a lost cause, I see
A willingness to change.
You see someone evil, I see
The exchange.
I look forward to reading more of your poetry in the future.
*hugs, Cat
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
turbo1904
Tue, 2022-05-24 00:31
Reply from POINT OF VIEW
Thank you, Cat, for the review and the pleasant things you said. I can tell we will get along just fine. I started jotting down little things. Out of scribble came some poetry. I have written a couple hundred poems. I write how I feel, react, I write my take on whatever topic it is. Thanks again Miss Cat.
Best Wishes,
Turbo1904
Geezer
Mon, 2022-05-23 15:32
I don't have...
any criticisms for this one on the form or the style. ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?
scribbler
Tue, 2022-05-24 14:48
greetings
I know it can be difficult to maintain a 2nd and 3rd line rhyme so doing so on this long of a poem is commendable