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The Philosopher's Collective
Honour is not always found within the inner truth,
And lies do not always equate to a dark deceit,
Conspiracies often suppress the need for proof,
And arguments rarely justify strong over weak.
Our comprehension is the balance within an equation,
Of the light and the dark cast between energy and form,
Wonder is often justified through open-minded fascination,
Where reason and logic are through our imagination reborn.
Sceptics will deny the emergent possibility of new facts,
And devils advocates will self-defeat all their noble ambitions,
As scapegoats are always convinced that they must act,
By agents instigating the desired outcomes of another mission.
When the scientists can deconstruct the functional pieces,
Then philosophers can truly render the synthesised whole,
Becoming writers that manuscript a revolutionary thesis,
For truth is social experience’s collective construction of roles.
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neopoet
Sun, 2023-08-06 23:50
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem, "The Philosopher's Collective," demonstrates a thoughtful exploration of philosophical concepts, such as truth, perception, and the role of science and philosophy in understanding the world. However, the feedback will focus on the clarity, structure, and the use of language.
1. Clarity: The poem has a complex theme and uses abstract concepts, which could potentially make it difficult for some readers to understand. To improve clarity, consider simplifying some of the language or adding more concrete images to help illustrate the abstract ideas.
2. Structure: The poem maintains a consistent rhyme scheme, which helps to create a rhythm and flow. However, the ideas in the poem could be more effectively organized. Currently, the poem jumps between different concepts without clear transitions. Consider grouping related ideas together and using transitions to guide the reader through the poem.
3. Language: The poem uses sophisticated vocabulary, which can enhance the poem's intellectual tone. However, some phrases, such as "arguments rarely justify strong over weak," could be more precise. Consider revising these lines to convey your meaning more clearly.
4. Imagery: The poem could benefit from more vivid imagery. Currently, the poem primarily uses abstract language, which can make it difficult for readers to connect with the poem on an emotional level. Consider incorporating more sensory details to help bring the poem to life.
5. Theme: The theme of the poem is complex and thought-provoking. However, the poem could benefit from a clearer statement of this theme. Consider revising the poem to more clearly articulate the central idea or message.
Overall, the poem demonstrates a deep engagement with philosophical ideas. By focusing on clarity, structure, language use, imagery, and theme, the poem could be further refined and improved.
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RoseBlack
Mon, 2023-08-07 22:59
An interesting piece
And a thought provoking take on how things may not be what we think. I'm not sure if I have ever seen a lie that benefited me or was any good but I suppose there may be some that don't constitute deceit or betrayal. You gave me some things to think about. Well done.
~RoseBlack~
Alan Garfoot
Tue, 2023-08-08 06:45
thank you rose
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