The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively utilizes a straightforward rhyme scheme (AABB) and a consistent rhythm, which can make the poem more engaging and memorable for readers. However, there are areas where the poem could be improved.

Firstly, the poem could benefit from more specific imagery. While the themes of failed leadership, power, and the potential for change are clear, the poem could be more impactful if it provided concrete examples or detailed descriptions. For example, instead of stating "Our leaders choose greed to gain power," the poem could describe specific actions or decisions that demonstrate this greed and lust for power.

Secondly, the poem could be more nuanced in its portrayal of leaders. While it is clear that the poem is criticizing leaders for their greed and deceit, it might be more effective if it also acknowledged the complexity and challenges of leadership. This could make the poem more thought-provoking and nuanced.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from more varied sentence structures. Most of the lines in the poem are similar in length and structure, which can make the poem feel monotonous. By varying sentence structures, the poem could become more dynamic and engaging.

Overall, while the poem effectively communicates its themes and utilizes a clear rhyme scheme, it could be improved by incorporating more specific imagery, acknowledging the complexity of leadership, and varying sentence structures.

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a good example of AA BB rhyme and you speak the truth. I'm not sure that the AI recognizes the need for being as succinct as this one is. I see where you can be a bit more descriptive, but it would require more lines. [You do have that option, as it is nowhere near the optimum length of 32 lines for one of the contests.] At any rate, I think that it might stand as is. ~ Geez.
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Hello Clentin.

I agree that you might explore lengthening the poem, but only if additional lines can enhance the description of the failures or those who are causing our failures.

Love the subject matter and I certainly agree! - Will

Hello, Clentin,
I feel this is some of your best work, and I think it is because it is filled with your passion. Sometimes it seems that you hold back a bit with your poetry, trying hard to rhyme and follow rules, but when you let your true energy flow, you really have something to say. I love the raw emotion in this, but I'm wondering if you're still holding back a little, yet. This is pretty impressive.
Thank you!
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I didn't realize what I was asking for. Very nicely done, and impassioned speech. I'm sure you would do well at speech writing, as long as it was something you believed in. ~ Geez.
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