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Night Owl

The roads go one way, like closed questions, I just moved from London, if I drop you here is that ok, I'm weary enough to dismiss directions, no fear in scarcity, too full cut to be afraid.

Nocturnal, not how it should be. No talons, or visions, or sound rebounding against my
tantrums, no keyring on the spare key i keep losing, just like the first one, just the same.

You wouldn’t hold me, how embarrassing for me, of course you were right, still I was painfully
lonely, and so fucking tired.

Maybe I'm not anything. I put on clothes like a stranger, stringing
sentences together, waiting tables like it matters. The view is scenic, sometimes it takes my
breath away when I don’t expect it. It’s flat like cardboard on the days I drink, pints of ink,
heavier than you’d think, nobody gets as drunk as me, or as quick.

Peace, dappled heat, all this green disconnected, leaves abstract, living and doing it better than
I can, fronds of lace, nodding with closed eyes as long as I dare, if I die I don’t mind, when I
open my eyes, it is always the same.

The mayflies in the morning mist shed their skin. She got drunk and fell asleep underneath a damp tarpaulin, and she is not a morning person. Or afternoon. Or evening.

Secrets, a few, an open book, the smell of yellowing pages, the flat iron afternoon. Oppressive
and narrow and well decorated, corridors of tired boards, announcing your intentions, well you
might as well walk around screaming your own name, there can’t be much difference.

A space to work hard for, a lock on the door. Maybe I'm not nothing, there’s no way to be sure.

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Free verse
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Comments

gives me a feeling of disjointed and depressed thinking. Not knowing where one belongs, not feeling welcome anywhere.
Coming home late at night, either from a job that's boring and tedious or from walking the streets, not wanting to go home. The floorboards creaking to announce your presence, when all you want to do is lie down and pass out to forget the day. I get that. I have been there, feeling left out and just going through the motions of living, because you don't know what else to do.
I'm sure that this poem has spoken to any and all the have read it. Maybe someone will be able to get through to you, and let you know, that better days are ahead, keep going, don't stop! If you can write well enough to speak to another person's heart, you must have some value. For poets are valuable, we need you. Your language is good, the theme is one that people will recognize, and it does manage to roll along. We hear you, keep writing. ~ Geezer.
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I can’t believe how well you understood that poem - I always feel like a schizophrenic rambling to myself in some asylum. Yours it the first feedback for a peon I’ve ever written because I’ve never shared it with anyone before, so thank you so much. I feel seen and proud that I touched someone! Thanks you for making my week x

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we try to see the poet and the things that matter to them. I am glad that you feel seen and proud that you touched us. I don't always get it right, but we have many poets here, and someone can usually relate to a piece. Your language use is good, and so too, your pace. I was tempted to ask you to use a four-line format, for easier reading, but I understand that many people
write this way and it is sometimes difficult to break the lines in the right places. So, carry on. Maybe there will be someone else that can help with making the form more readable and easier on the eyes. Good work, ~ Geezer.
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