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Submitted by tsbabadepoet on Tue, 2012-02-21 15:18

Am sure you don't know. You just don’t know how much I care, you just don’t know how my head aches when I think of losing you, yet your thought still remains the cure to my aches. You just don’t know my tears, my loss for sleep, loss for taste and muse into holding you in my arms again when u left for school on J6.
Now! You must know u re my right, my choice, my taste, my dream come life, my joy out of tears, my smile and my totality.
You are the love cherished for this day
Love you

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emogothgirl

Tue, 2012-02-21 16:37

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i hope this girl finds out somehow! i too like to write this way sometimes. nicely penned.
always,
mag

weirdelf

Thu, 2012-02-23 02:05

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are re for are. Use a spell check.

The content is powerful and I look forward to it written with correct english.

cheers,
Jess
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