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MY LOVE (first poem)

My love is like a clear spring day
whose golden sunbeams go their way
then suddenly explode in dew
to sparkle once again like new

Like spotting a quail upon the ground
her young ones following around
with a tiny chirping sound
this bird not sure just where she's bound.

Or spying a small calf just born
a frolicking this sunny morn
crying out with joyful bleat
while running 'round on tireless feet.

And looking at a tall pine tree
whose limbs reach toward being free
Heavenward its substance towers
while shouting out about god's powers.

My love is like a budding tree
i hope she feels the same toward me

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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OK this is the first poem i ever wrote about 45 years ago to Susan who was my high school sweetheart and is still married to me. Now, this poem was packed away during recent move so I posted this from memory. i'm pretty sure memory failed in stanza 4 but I'm also pretty sure the rest is close to exact. I wrote this in 1972 then promptly wrote my next poem in 2008 lol
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inspired by the famous My Love Has Got A Red Red Nose, That whistles out of tune?
Whatever, it is an excellent poem especially so for a first write.

Keith Logan
the happy chappy
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But it Was inspired by "My Love Is Like A Red Red Rose"

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I inspired such verse.
Interesting to see where you started from and where you are now. There are visible traits of your work nowadays here, but so much less polished. Not surprising really.
A lovely first poem.
Jx

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This was written while a junior in high school. I guess we all carry traces of how we began.....stan

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even more that the poem "45 years ago to Susan who was my high school sweetheart and is still married to me" it so incredible.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

the power of the written word lol. And it amazes me even more than it does you that she has put up with me this long. My newest strategy is to never quite get our new house finished, That way she'll Have to keep me around lol

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I am glad to be a bachelor now, too selfish to accommodate another person in my house.
The only drawback is no partner to check lumps and blemishes and nag one into seeing a doctor. That's the reason married men live longer.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

I thought we lived longer as punishment.............even though joking I'd best not let Susan see this lol

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I am really impressed with the strength and power of your memory! this piece is really good, and I can see the roots of your present workings here. today: June 27th 2017 is Steven and my 35th wedding anniversary! marrying him was the best thing I have ever done.

*hugs, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
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Lovely lady.
And many more to look forward to
Jxxx

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thank you Jane!

*hugs, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

What were we talking about ? lol. So much for my memory. I'll eventually dig out either the written copy of this or the carved in wood version which Susan's parents had done. Then we'll see how my memory really is. This coming Aug. 3rd Susan and I will be married for 43 years..............stan

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on so many wonderful years together :)

*hugs, Cat

and "hello" to Susan!

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

you

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Newly weds. Congrats and I hope ya'll have many more...and I wish spell check would stop labeling "ya'll" a misspell lol

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