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My Bouquet

Coiffed in bouquets-my flowers and roses,
every color presents a meaning;
indigo, ivy, and yellow daffodils
charming red, to flame the feelings.

Red is passion, love and energy,
orange summons moments of happiness.
Yellow's clarity, gold, and truth while
blue enhances the dreamer's calmness.

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Another attempt in trochee and dactyl.
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What a lovely title and in the poem you have indeed presented a bouquet of colors explaining what each stands for....pretty innovative...

i think it would read even better if you change the end of Vesrses 2 & 4 in Stanza 2...ofcourse that's just a suggestion...wait to hear others..

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

for the compliment. It is always great to hear from you.
I don't think I need to worry about the endings of those lines as near rhymes are acceptable in such a non-strict form.
Again your thoughts are always appreciated.

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I didnt mean in the context of rhyming...i meant flow wise...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

and beautiful still.

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Thank you dear sir!
I am pleased to know you like it.

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WalMart had them on sale here...
color not created with dye but genes..
intense...mesmerizing..
if we can see...the beauty
that is there...

fantastic vivid write Rula

I always highly value your visit.

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Hooray!! You did it! I know you can do it and see, I'm right! Bravo! Congrats! So proud of you.

Alid

Much appreciate your encouraging words. :)

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one spondee only xxx

Coiffed in bou | -quets my | flow -ers and | ros -es,
eve -ry | col -or pre | -sents a | mean -ing;
in –dig –o | ivy, and | yell -ow | daff –o -dils
charm -ing | red, to | flame the | feel -ings

Red is | pass -ion | love and | en –er -gy,
o -range | sum -ons | mom  -ents of | happ –i -ness
Yell -ow's | clar  -i -ty | gold and | truth while
blue en | -hances the | dream -er's | calm -ness

a very pretty write, I like it more the more I read it...

love judy

xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

I think "while" is not stressed. At least I didn't when I read it.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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Thank you dear Judy
for your kind words.

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A lovely piece Rula, what more can I say,
Yours as always, Ian

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