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The Music Of Silence
I close my eyes and at once its mute echo chimes
I listen and interpret the lush lilting lyricism of nature's sultry emerald chanteuse
As the chorus of everyday cacophony subsides a subtler sonnet is crafted
And upon the lyre of thoughtful psyche a cord profound is struck
I open my heart to the wordless whisper of Creation's vital hymn
I fete my soul and intuit the soft sensual throb of infinity's passionate pulse
I clear my mind of mundane traffic to yield a higher concentration expansion
That the exquisite rhapsody of hush may be relished without clutter's jam
I close my eyes and its womb of calm envelops me
Content I reside at the sphonic court of its vast placid empire
The eloquent serenade of its sublime soundless concert steeps me in its solace
The still deep music of silence the sweet unbroken score of Pax's savored measure
Style / type:
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Last few words:
I wrote this in celebration of nature's quiet beauty and the insight, peace, and comfort it continually yields me. I hope it encourages all who read it to stop take a deep breath and reflect.
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Comments
raj
Sun, 2016-07-10 15:18
The title attracted me to
The title attracted me to this poem and thereafter I soaked in its verses which though long at times flowed smoothly when read aloud...a pleasure read for me..
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
jane210660
Sun, 2016-07-10 16:48
I too love the sound of
I too love the sound of silence.
To be honest, I found this a bit wordy and purple passagey, which to my ears and senses interrupted the flow and detracted from the meaning.
I would do a bit of pruning, to make your poem more succinct.
But of course, that is only my opinion.
Jx
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Sparrow
Mon, 2016-07-11 18:58
William
The song rang out from your words,
and echoed among the stars, as they stored the information of the universe in their own song.
Lovely piece slightly highbrow
but a symphony of tones
to shift in rhythm with the infinity
we try to label as time,
Yours Ian.T
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