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Many Doors To Open (Feb. Contest)

She knocked at many doors of opportunity
But none would open to her in her lifetime
She hustled day and night with all her might
Making sales here and there with her creativity.

She ran the streets in her high heels
Looking for love in all the wrong men
The door to true love just wouldn't open
Her boobs and booty is what appeals.

She got lucky this Valentine's Day
Two weeks of romance and some fudge
Then she opened the door to motherhood
A door she opened to Mother's Day.

Too many doors to open pass the corridors of life
One door open and another closes all the time
And the door to success ain't worth a dime
When walking through it your back catches a knife.

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A vivid capture from everyday's life, until the last two lines. I can't see your point unless I am missing something and it's meant to be of mocking sense.

PS. One door open[s] and another closes all the time

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Thats the point I was going for. May Dora open or so t open while some re open the closes. Thanks. The ending was intentionally mocking. Does it work or not?

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For an Elizabethan sonnet maybe (((winks)))

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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Practicing the sonnet rhyme theme was intention when writing the free verse. Did it happen? Meter is a killer lol.

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Best of luck in the contest
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Thanks. I hope win. .

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A great write and my reply is as I gave to Carries.
The future doors are yours and they will open for you maybe you need to have a reason to move on, Yours Ian xx

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Thanks. There are many reasons to move on and many to stay put. I may write a poem on some of the issues to stay put lol

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Thanks. There are many reasons to move on and many to stay put. I may write a poem on some of the issues to stay put lol

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This poem opened the doors of your pent up emotions about the wrong doings of a society and how frustrated one can be if one door of opportunity and hope opens momentarily only to be closed ...i think you have lived up to the responsibility of a poet of bringing out issues of those who are downtrodden for the society to think ...

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raj (sublime_ocean)

Thanks I try to bring out issues in my poetry in different ways

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I'm not accustomed to that side of you.

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Lost my phone do I've even darker now. lol

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That last line really caught me by surprise ........stan

A lot of time opportunities are missed bc some will stab you the back so you won't progress. So when walking through doors ppl must watch their backs.

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Got new phone and feeling better for now

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