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Love Language
it helps to remember
that someone
with a different language
is still speaking
the same words
that "tree"
and "friend"
and "God"
still mean
life
from the earth
from a fellow human
from a power
way beyond us
kids of every race
have teddy bears
and tooth brushes
adults, the jobs
they must go to
the hard decisions
they must make
like how to deal
with monstrosity
without becoming
a monster
what languages
to learn
so that you can
tell people
across the tracks
in another part
of the world
or who is just
a little different
from ourselves
(because we are all
also different)
"I love you"
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gregwa8
Tue, 2018-08-28 01:50
thanks for your feedback,
thanks for your feedback, mark. while "God" can be something that separates unnecessarily, I'm trying to find the similarities between people of different religions/beliefs in the poem. God is so many things to so many people, but usually some sort of "life force," some positive concern for nature and humanity. in our current climate, however, so many people are skeptical of Muslims (or Christians (or Wiccans, or whoever)), but as long as we try not to be monsters, learn a language of love one for another, I think we can benefit from each other's company. even our different spiritual conceptions. I try to listen beyond the labels. thanks for your kind words. and being honest with your thoughts. I appreciate your sense of humor :)
greg
lovedly
Mon, 2018-08-27 22:57
the man seated besides you in a cinema hall
becomes god
when you have a heart attack
he picks you up and calls 911
is not the real God
not the one, one may imagine
he comes after recovery only
possibly
or to the mortuary
when one can't see
still lovely poetry
gregwa8
Tue, 2018-08-28 02:35
by the way, I love the Omnia
by the way, I love the Omnia, Fairytale song/reading!
Rula
Tue, 2018-08-28 12:52
I would call it
the language of humanity greg!
thanks for sharing. ^_^
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gregwa8
Tue, 2018-08-28 18:04
Thanks for your comment, Rula
Thanks for your comment, Rula. Means a lot. ❤