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The Long Gift of Time

There are those days
That feel like getting stuck
Behind a double wide trailer

Like getting caught
In a swirling eddy
In the river of life

Like being put on hold
That damn elevator music
And the message repeating

“We’re sorry for the inconvenience,
We’ll be with you
As quickly as we can”

"Please stay on the line"

As quickly as you can
Can feel slower
Than petrification

But those days become

Banners across the back
Of our lives

Reminders that time
Is not in our control

We are in its

And it means always
To be a gift

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a good take on Time and its impact on our life. I thought the line "we are in its" to be incomplete, is it?

raj (sublime_ocean)

thanks, raj. I think "we are in its" is correct, in context, if a bit of a strange sentence by itself.

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And then there are the days
We get laid !!!!

An interesting piece, Greg, and I was grateful for the lift of the final two lines.


haha! thanks obadiah.

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I like the poem, especially the ending. The idea is clear.
I relate to the images. The flow is slightly hesitant as if you want to hold your reader and test his patience. LOL.


thanks Iriz. sometimes it's fun to torture the reader. lol.

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Iriz.. u and I just composed
on the common relative of man

yes there is nothing beyond time
so does your lovely poetry rhyme

thanks lovedly!

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I like elevator music, it amuses me.

other than that, cleanly cut and tailored

catch you later,


ha! thanks al. elevator music can be pleasant, but that's about all. lol.

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