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A Little Bit

Wanting to move on,
But don’t want to forget.
Need to loosen the grip,
But if I do,
Will it be too loose,
That you’ll slip away?

I shall make a little box,
And fill it full of you,
I’ll tie it tightly shut,
And put it away,
For just a little bit.

And though I love you so,
I need to move on,
Because I need to make new memories,
And live my life again.

But when the time comes,
And I need to feel your comfort,
I shall pull box out,
Open it up,
And look deep in my heart,
I shall remember again,
But only for a little bit.

So with these last words,
I shall move on,
Though know I’ll always love you,
I just need to let go.

But only for a little bit.

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Comments

to let go and what to hang on to, is always a problem. I understand the writer's predicament, as I have been there myself. Not an easy subject but handled well. The terseness of the lines, make me think of wanting to escape, but I think that you need to add a few words here and there. Try this:

I want to move on
But don't want to forget
I need to loosen my grip
But if I do
Will it be so loose
That you'll slip away?

Making a break and leaving comfort behind, is not easy at all.
Nice work in general, with a good title. ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

"Pull your box out" nice analogy for putting having placed something away for a later examination. Unrequited love piece, very full of emotion and angst.

I'm looking forward to seeing/reading more of your work!

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