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LAPPING UP POEMY

Today is about to come
I see rays of the morning dawn
Cool chilly breeze is blowing
as cats are meowing
lapping up their milk
before the twilight

I can see coming above the distant hill
I too am now thinking
to lap up composing poemy
but the blood which flows within
says hold on
let the Inferno rise above to the zenith
then you may think
perhaps may change your mind
when comes the sunset twilight
no one like anyone else can be born
why lap up this morn

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

How true we are all born unique. this is a truly fabulous poem.

Thank you...Teddy

Now I'm tired thanx
lovedly [email protected]

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I know you are, this year and covid has also made us all tired, I'm tired and i'm half your age. be well my friend, i hope to see one of your wonderful covid poems in the august cometition as the theme is covid and i know you have written some beautiful poetry about it. i shall be rooting for you.

Thank you...Teddy

lovedly, what the hell is a poemy?
Cool, chilly are much the same thing.
Try "A chilly breeze is blowing"
If the dawn is here, then it is not [before] the twilight
it is [in] the twilight.
What do you see coming above the distant hill?

I know, after getting such a great review by Teddy 15
here comes Geezer, tearing up your Poemy and leaving the scraps
blowing in the wind of that chilly breeze.

It's just that I know you can do better. I really do like your
thoughts here, I just think that you could put them together
with a little more thought. You should have waited until the zenith! ~ Geez.
.

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I was dog tired
half asleep
so just trashed what came to me
Need be I'll scrap it
Dearest Gee

this week I a have been running like a bunny or a bee
like to now flee
or become once again
a butterfly
Dear Gee
two twilight's
sunset then twilight
takes over the darker night
and
morning one
twilight ere comes up the dawn
and across the hill one sees
the sprawling spreading sun's rays
Gee what will you call it do tell me please .

once dawn is born
day takes on
So I thought friend
do help me to my vision amend
amen
you are now so nice to me I can with half blind now see thankee

author comment

Dog tired

Could work

poemy, I read In light of the theme of this poem tired and that we are all unique and all have our own ways of writing and communicating.

I'm tired too guys sorry.

Thank you...Teddy

before the dawn. Dawn is the start of day. Evening twilight is just after the sun sets; before the night. Simple. You are tired, stop your dallying around all night and get a bit of sleep. You're eighty now, for God's sake! Geez.
.

Our Chatroom is open 24/7 Feel free to use it for
keeping in touch We have poets around the world and it is fun
to have real-time conversations with those that are up
all night or on the other side of the world.
.

GEE I am really sleepy
@80 now its past midnight
lol

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