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Knowlege Bombs...

Killer’s on the hunt
Heart of steel and face of stone
Billy dropping knowledge bombs
he won’t leave Gee alone

Now look here, Mr. Budd
There’s a limit you can’t pass
I have to check, with this here tube
for the bug that’s up your ass

Bending Billy Budd over
Killer picks up a hose
There were screams of penetration
“Now the next one’s up your nose”

Training wheels seem funny
That’s just a joke; I’m laughing too
Locking pliers on your nuts
is that fun for you?

A Kotex holder on Geezer’s bike?
That’s too much, you see
I told you once before. I’m sure
Now you gotta dance with me

Twisted nipples, bruised and bleeding
Sore throat that smells of shit
Brown gunk is running down his leg
He’s rubbing bloody little tits

Run back to your family van
Dream of motorbikes and such
Someday she’ll let you have one
if you don’t fuck up too much

Now B.B.’s balls are b.b.’s
and he sits on a funny tilt
Dropping knowledge bombs ain’t easy
when your voice has got a lilt

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Structured: Western
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Up to your usual standard, a good read.
Lol. Great to see killers friends are moving again,
Had to edit my comment as I read it again this morning and it's fun.
Hope your Headache is better, stay on the pill lol..
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

little something to put someone in their place. Thought I'd post it just to keep Killer in the limelight. I had a headache when I posted and was in a hurry to go lie down. Thanks for the read and comment, ~ Gee

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to ask who you are putting in their place...hope it isnt me :)

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Would not want to be BB!! The hose up the ass is almost as good as the electric guitar being shoved up the guy's ass and turned on!!!! How I love Killer!! He never disappoints me!! Nevermore is looking forward to meeting him at your next chat!

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Would not want to be BB!! The hose up the ass is almost as good as the electric guitar being shoved up the guy's ass and turned on!!!! How I love Killer!! He never disappoints me!! Nevermore is looking forward to meeting him at your next chat!

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

the computer loved it so much, it decided to post my comment three times...all the same, I had fun reading the poem again.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

your love of the macabre. He is looking forward to meeting Nevermore just as much.
He thinks that they will get along just fine. ~ Gee

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They will get along. If I didnt have her I would lose what is left of my mind.

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Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

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