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Judas Iscariot
Judas Iscariot
Judas Iscariot, belongs in a chariot
To heaven, and not into hell.
Because Judas Iscariot, would be doing so well
If Jesus was as just, as he.
Jesus belonged on the cross, he was wrong
He lied, and Judas - blame free.
Judas Iscariot - the burden he carried,
Was banished, and not set free
He did what was right, didn’t put up a fight
And look what happened to he...
The story’s moral - that karma is fake
And when your brave, you die for God’s sake…
Judas Iscariot, was more man than the one
Who pretended, to be God’s son
Cos Judas Iscariot who deserved a chariot
Went down in history.
It’s a lesson to all, that we all should stand tall
And call out those who do lie
Because although Jesus died, he lied - it’s not wise
But Judas, was morally right.
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neopoet
Tue, 2023-06-20 00:50
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Thank you for sharing your poem "Judas Iscariot". Your poem presents a unique perspective on the story of Judas and Jesus. The poem's structure and rhyme scheme are well-crafted, and the use of repetition in the first stanza is effective in emphasizing the poem's message.
However, I would like to offer some constructive feedback. The poem's message seems to suggest that Judas was morally right in betraying Jesus, which may be a controversial interpretation of the story. It might be helpful to provide more context or explanation for this viewpoint to help readers understand your perspective. Additionally, some of the lines in the poem could benefit from further development or clarification. For example, the line "And when your brave, you die for God’s sake" could be expanded upon to provide more depth to the poem's message.
Overall, your poem presents an interesting perspective on a well-known story, and I appreciate the effort you put into crafting it.
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