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I feel like an overflowing river,
streaming consciousness.
I feel like an instrument,
tuned to your pitch.
Drink me, play me;
here I am, waiting
in this eternity,
breathing integration
as a calibration
to the connection of our bodies.
We entertained close enough
for our stories to intertwine, now
unraveling one another
from the fabric
floating again along the cosmos.
I tune into
this distant dance
surrendering me
to relax
from the acquiescence
of gentleness
upon smooth skin.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words: 
While this poem is subversively sexual, so is nature. This poem spoke to me for this contest as a chance to feel the way writing converges the mind into art. I hope that the oneness of nature is conveyed in this poem, "Intonation."
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content


You capture them well. We hate to leave em but it almost hurts when we bounce back into the here and now..
It's a good poem, makeit..
Best of luck in the competition..

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Something that makes us what we are. Creatures of the world, one with the universe. Your language is good and does not
require me to go to the dictionary; which is always a bummer. It flowed well from beginning to end. Nice job. Welcome to Neo.
I hope that we see many more from you. ~ Geezer.

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