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Interesting

I read a sonnet, found it interesting,
The form is best used for proclaiming love
but this held naught about the joys of spring
or of that fondness fitting like a glove.
Instead it dwelt on questions beyond ken,
eternal strife does not begin or end.
As women stand one side, the other men,
can from such mire a victory ascend?

There is a love that asks for no return,
a giving thing that seeks another's good.
But as the giver's heart is left to yearn
the sacrifice is oft' misunderstood.

'Tis Godliness to give without receipt
to help another stand upon their feet.

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Comments

I've never had much interest in
sonnets, but in a course it is certainly
required. Often, while I appreciate
the counting, the delivery suffers for
the sake of obtaining the correct count.
You seem to be very good at it though,
you've obviously been at it for a long time.

A better title would help draw in the reads,
just an opinion.

Richard

I lay it out as I see it:
The first eight lines set up a premise,
the next four expound on that,
the final couplet draws a conclusion.
Finally, I will consider your suggestion to work on a better title.

Keith Logan
the happy chappy
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Normally a sonnet is in
iambic pentameter, or traditionally
anyway, that's what I was alluding
to.

is used in Shakespeare plays, ending each act with a rhyming couplet. It is the nearest thing in poetic terms to every day speech.

Keith Logan
the happy chappy
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good work with the lines of "love" and "glove" to make them go smoothly!

*always, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

it is not easy to find an acceptable rhyme with love, so I fell back this time on an old stalwart.

Keith Logan
the happy chappy
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