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Innovation
I'm the I's(eyes) in the sentence "I Am King..
I'm never blinded ,I can see.
The say heavy is the head that wears the crown
Well I'm prepared to frown
Like a silent geek.
I Am King ,I came with innovations
My rhymes and schemes are made in the old pages
I stay in the same location
You can come get me ,
Coz saying we gotta meet to beef is not healthy.
I'm full of ideas my ingredients could pop bellies
Not afraid of change,
But my anger's drawn from it.
All this metamorphosis got me tripping on what matters more for sis.
I'm hardly patient ,I keep nodding waiting for my creations not to become evasive
But a lot is changing like variations.
You should bow down ,
Respect the king ,
For his time worth before they behead him
And then the prince shall fill the shoes
To continue the kingdom selflessly .
Now your majesty merged as the emergency was emerging see how tragic indefinitely occurs when the curse or the blessing to be king is something you're born with tangibly.
I was born like this ,that's why I walk like this ,and talk like this
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neopoet
Sun, 2024-04-28 14:20
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Innovation" explores the theme of leadership, creativity, and the burden of responsibility. The use of wordplay with "I's" and "eyes" in the opening line is clever and sets a strong tone for the rest of the poem. The repetition of "I Am King" throughout the poem reinforces the speaker's sense of authority and power.
The imagery of being prepared to frown "like a silent geek" is intriguing and adds depth to the portrayal of the speaker. The references to staying in the same location and being full of ideas suggest a sense of stability and abundance in creativity.
The poem effectively conveys a mix of confidence and vulnerability, particularly in lines like "Not afraid of change, But my anger's drawn from it." This juxtaposition adds complexity to the speaker's character and highlights the internal struggles faced by those in positions of leadership.
The use of metaphorical language, such as "bow down" and "respect the king," adds a regal and commanding
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Geezer
Sun, 2024-04-28 11:39
Innovation, indeed...
I'm thinking that your theme regards monarchies as being the right way to govern
as long as the heir is beneficent and not a despot. Okay by me, if the country is happy with it.
~ Geezer.
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