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"If Only"

“If Only”

I know I’m not supposed to be here.
If they would have lived,
If I would have died,
The world would be right.
If only they would have survived

I wouldn’t be alive.
Everything would be alright.
He wouldn’t be dead inside.
She wouldn’t resent me for surviving
And living this terrible life.

Maybe they wouldn’t hate me for being alive
I’ve been striving to die
But every time I try to die
I think of all the people
Who would say that I was a waste of life.

If only I would've died everything would be alright.
No one would know me
Maybe then I could be free of this life.
Because every day I’m here I dream of being slain
It’s past time for me to quit this life.
If only they would have survived I wouldn’t be such a waste of life.

- Deep Thoughts

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I spent 1 depressing hour reflecting on my life. Your welcome.

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