I like your gentle rhyming pattern. The change in pattern in the third and fourth verse does not hurt the poem. I am tuned into the subject matter, being a gloomy sort of old biddy. (I like it very much)

These lines plucked my heart strings:

With face in hands
I try to hide
the tears that are the rain

always, Cat

I remember a song that said "I will do my crying in the rain"
A lovely write there, with all the memories flooding in where the tears are for times gone by both you and I, Yours Ian.T

I enjoyed this but even so I have a few things to offer lol
L-3 and 4
..awaiting the first sign of dawn
..declaring life's begun again
L-9 delete the
L-11 Try so long since.....
last line maybe the tears beneath the rain?
just a few ideas for you to use or not.........stan

It's easily my favorite of yours. And yes, I do like your poetry though I'm betting you don't think that. wesley

the speaker seem to miss a loved one
and lost in the quietness of the moment whiles watching the raindrops,
a recollection of days gone come back again.
Yet it's only a shadow of the past which the speaker for a moment they were real.

I enjoyed the rhyming and the imagery (...heaven's tears)

great work.

respects:

WonderGolly :)

just like Cat said..it plucked my heart string too...beautiful sentments expressed so nicely...