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I MISSED YOU

I missed you

I missed you Dear

For the past twenty eight hours

You are eighty kilometers away from me

You are sleeping eating there as a child but

I have lost everything here cause I missed you

I cannot forget your angle smile and

I cannot digest your absence for such a long hours

You have moved to shape your future but

This old man missed his present with you

I may dream on your future but

I am not so strong enough to meet this loneliness

Send me your smile to guide me in dark

Send me your childish speech

To forget all my worries and pains

Forty hell days I will have to spend

To meet your face in smile and bliss

My daughter! My love!

Come dear to heal my pains and wounds.

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Sad thoughts of someone dear being missed nearly as soon as they have left if not before.
This is written nearly like a letter not sure which poetry form to put it in, this sense of loss can be put in so many poetic ways and using this as a guide to the order of things.
I still miss the South African Skies, Yours Ian.T.

"Angle" smile should be "Angel"

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