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I MISSED YOU
I missed you
I missed you Dear
For the past twenty eight hours
You are eighty kilometers away from me
You are sleeping eating there as a child but
I have lost everything here cause I missed you
I cannot forget your angle smile and
I cannot digest your absence for such a long hours
You have moved to shape your future but
This old man missed his present with you
I may dream on your future but
I am not so strong enough to meet this loneliness
Send me your smile to guide me in dark
Send me your childish speech
To forget all my worries and pains
Forty hell days I will have to spend
To meet your face in smile and bliss
My daughter! My love!
Come dear to heal my pains and wounds.
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Ian.T
Sun, 2013-04-14 05:29
Sad thoughts of someone dear
Sad thoughts of someone dear being missed nearly as soon as they have left if not before.
This is written nearly like a letter not sure which poetry form to put it in, this sense of loss can be put in so many poetic ways and using this as a guide to the order of things.
I still miss the South African Skies, Yours Ian.T.
"Angle" smile should be "Angel"
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