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I Am

Submitted by judyanne on Wed, 2012-04-25 05:17

I AM Being
Oblivious Grace, Eternal Serenity
awareness ebbed
languidly infused
undisturbed, ubiquitous

Thought stirs essence
a seed of need quivers, a fidget
flutters the fabric
irradiates a candle far away
now to be forever perceived

rippling breeze gently brushes substance
a yawn takes space from me
a spark of perception
I own interest

a quest incites energy
born exploding a singularity

colourful bursts of vibrant brilliance
shatter the dark

light streams -
swirls magically in whirlpools of incandescence

a gasp
within, a knowing is allowed

i am manifest

freely wrapping, vaguely knotting
roaming
gathering knowledge

endlessly
through myriad experience
illustrious time
immeasurable emotion

occasionally to circle back
for a Day in Benevolent Grace
until a dream again stirs desire
and boredom compels to explore
to remember

no destination
forever somewhere

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Esker

Wed, 2012-04-25 08:13

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"undisturbed, ubiquitous"
fave line

languor about this thats pleasant
and a sharp underlying meaning
about taking that pause midstep
for me anyway to examine
something more then just
the sense of the ordinary

exquisite Judyanne

Thank You!

judyanne

Wed, 2012-04-25 23:27

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thank you very much for the great comments
so glad you could relate to this
love judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Roscoe Lane

Thu, 2012-04-26 01:27

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Faultlessly fabulous piece of poetry, great to readout loud, love it. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

judyanne

Thu, 2012-04-26 10:45

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thank you very much for the read and great comments
muchly appreciated
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2012-04-26 11:53

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Roscoe is so right! This piece is a MUST to be reat out loud! Breathtaking!

always, Cat

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judyanne

Thu, 2012-04-26 13:45

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thank you so very much for the read and the very supportive comment
love judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Nordic cloud

Wed, 2012-08-29 14:25

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Tossed in the leaves of ancient thoughts
your spring poem gives a vitality to its message,
clothed in words of colourful description,
we can read this many times
and each time get something else...from somewhere!

annanya

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

loved

Thu, 2012-08-30 11:49

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at every sister,
but couldn't find one like you
wow…
I begged for dictionary to improve my vocabulary ,
they all laughed at me
mad maybe!
ask for oxygen or an intravenous injection
or take one a side maybe…
what blasted dictionary
I had to come home to bathe in your loveliest
of loveliest poetry

until a dream again stirs desire
and boredom compels to explore
to remember .........wonder f u l l l l l l

loved

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