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At The Holy Month Of Ramadan
The holy month's crescent appears,
to fill the hearts with joy, and please,
to bless the world with real relief;
the less fortunate; those in need.
The holy month's crescent appears,
to demolish the poor's heavy tears,
to call for mercy and spread out peace,
not only then, but through out the year.
The holy month's crescent appears,
at the ninth's month of the Islamic year,
the Muslims fast, pursue good deeds
and call to cheer up all their peers.
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neopoet
Sat, 2023-04-01 14:38
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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Overall, "At The Holy Month Of Ramadan" is a well-crafted poem that beautifully captures the spirit and significance of Ramadan. The repetition of the opening line emphasizes the importance of the crescent's appearance and sets a contemplative tone that carries throughout the poem.
The language is simple and accessible, but there are moments of poetic flourish that elevate the poem, such as the phrase "to demolish the poor's heavy tears." The poem's message of compassion and solidarity is clear and inspiring, making it a perfect fit for the holy month of Ramadan.
One suggested line edit would be to replace "apears" with "appears" in the final stanza for correct spelling. This small change would not only improve the poem's clarity but also enhance the overall professionalism of the piece.
Overall, "At The Holy Month Of Ramadan" is a lovely poem that effectively conveys the essence of Ramadan and its universal message of generosity and kindness.
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Rula
Sat, 2023-04-01 16:27
Thank you Neopoet AI
That is really impressive and useful.
Receiving such a critique in no time gives Neopoet an extra advantage over any other poetry sites
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author commentGeezer
Sat, 2023-04-01 14:55
Nicely told...
this story of Ramadan, gives the Muslim connection to the story of charity, and how we wish all would act toward the poor and
less fortunate. To lifting up the soul, along with the body. I cannot find anything to fault. ~ Geez.
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Rula
Sat, 2023-04-01 16:37
Thank you sir Gee
For reading and commenting.
It means a lot!
Much appreciate it!
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author commentLavender
Sat, 2023-04-01 17:28
At The Holy Month of Ramadan
Hello, Rula,
Beautiful poetry. I feel the peace and goodwill throughout. I know you usually use a structured style - what lovely structure is this?
Happy Ramadan to you, my friend,
L
Rula
Sat, 2023-04-01 17:31
Dearest friend Lavender
Thank you for the good wishes and of course for reading and commenting.
This is my own style. It's not at least a form I know.
I am happy you like it.
Thank you dear
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author commentRosewood Apothecary
Mon, 2023-04-03 07:01
Excellent
Love the double inclusion of the crescent moon symbolism and the rhythm and pace are great. Faith. Hope. Charity. I’m not a religious man. I hold all three in high regard and stockpile them in abundance.
May your holy month be filled with blessings for us all and may the faithful, the hopeful, and the charitable inherit the earth.
Tim
Geezer
Mon, 2023-04-03 09:27
I wish...
I had said that Tim. ~ Geez.
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Rula
Mon, 2023-04-03 13:13
Amen to that Tim
Thank you for the wishes and your nice comment.
I even liked your comment better than my poem. :)
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author commentRoseBlack
Fri, 2023-04-07 18:30
Wishing you a very happy Ramadan
A beautiful poem with such heartfelt meaning... well done
~RoseBlack~