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His light, her darkness

her smile,

her laugh,

lights up his darkness,


her hair,

her eyes,

smoothens his sharpness,


her voice,

her joy,

cures his depression,


her absence,

her need,

brought waves of attention,


she strides the corridors,

brave but vulnerable,

as her enemy crawls the walls,

dangerous and harmful,


she seeks through the day,

swimming in bright art,

he pounces around,

swaying in the dark,


she hold the meaning,

of what everyone calls “life”,

he impatiently waits,

to steal it in the night,


she battles him in war,

using all her might and strength,

he doesn’t give up the fight,

going to any and all lengths,


she wins some,

she loses some,

she silently mourns all her loss,


he celebrates his victories,

not knowing greed comes at a cost,


she continues her journey,

fighting for all souls,

but sometimes fails,

as he loses control,


his power and force,

it suddenly becomes too much,

cold, numb, and darkness,

fills you at his touch,


she’s yin,

he’s yang,

together their balanced,

like the sun and moon,

they themselves are challenged,


giving life is her power,

spreading death is his curse,

working together is a struggle,

not trying at all is worse,


she’s his light,

he’s her darkness,

they stay by each other’s side,




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Free verse
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Last few words: 
This poem is based on life and death, which leads to being fictional.
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yperhaps instead of pounces you might try another word to descrbe this action
your title says HIS light etc yet your first line reads "lights up his darkness" perhaps you should reverse the title?

all in all I like what I've read


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