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Hidden Room Challenge #18

Submitted by RoseBlack on Mon, 2022-08-22 19:36

Beneath the house
A dampened hell
On the brink of madness
My sanity waxes and wanes

Ankle chains that cut my flesh
Ties that bind
My wrists so tight
Soundproof walls, stifling screams

Footsteps on the stairs
Here he comes again
My happy captor
What will it be this time

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Contest: 
Neopoet Random Challenge # 18
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Jackweb

Tue, 2022-08-23 03:33

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Solitary confinement increases the risk of torture or ill-treatment going unnoticed and undetected, and it can in itself constitute torture and ill-treatment, in particular where it is prolonged or indefinite.

Staying in close prison cell is like being in a lonely world of darkness! A single foot step within reminds you the torturer is back to continue basking his beats.
I wonder what kind of treatment those were captured by terrorist in Nigeria are facing right now.

A fifty year old woman narrated her ordeal when she was released from her captors. During her live interview, she said, 'I became sex-buffet', all dined on her. 'She said'.

Nice job !
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

RoseBlack

Tue, 2022-08-23 09:30

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What an awful experience for that poor woman! There are so many different ways people can be imprisoned and none of them bode well for the prisoner. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.

~RoseBlack~

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Geezer

Tue, 2022-08-23 11:06

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the beginning of a poem of rescue! I think that Killer might be interested in rescuing this fair maiden! Hmmmmm...
You made the terror real! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

Tue, 2022-08-23 13:02

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I'm sure she would enjoy a rescue, Killer style.

~RoseBlack~

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Sen99

Fri, 2022-08-26 06:07

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Have you seen the recent film Black Phone ? you have captured the feeling of dread in this poem, nice one

RoseBlack

Fri, 2022-08-26 08:23

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I have not seen it. My one daughter watched it and said it was great. Glad you enjoyed.

~RoseBlack~

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