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Here I sit and here I stare

Here I sit
and here I stare.
Watching the
clouds glide
across the air.
No more worries
no more cares .
Leaving my
soul to soar
up god's
golden stairs.

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Not Explicit Content

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you are looking at the sky. Very nice; only one thing to fix; [god's]. ~ Geez.
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Edward

In that place i seem to be after loosing so many.

I liked the flow

It spoke to me

Electric blue

Electric Blue

I think this might flow better if you ended lines on strong words, rather than weak words. For example:

Here I sit
(and) here I stare.
Watching the (clouds glide)

This is a nice, simple, meditative piece, which could be enhanced with less choppiness.

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