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A Greeting from Palestine

When the morning aroma
brushed an olive tree,
it sent my soul free.
hushed the nestlings,
as if mystic lullabies.
silenced the angry waves,
and calmed the sea.
It stamped each blooming rose-bud
 with an exquisite freshness
announcing a new day 
for you and me.

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Free verse
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Comments

lovely imagery rula
I really like this write
imo it needs a few words culled – just me as you know
my ideas -

When the morning aroma
brushed an olive tree (at Home)
it sent my soul free(.-,)
( It) hushed the nestlings
as if mystic lullabies (. -,)
( It) silenced the angry waves
and buffered the sea (, -.)
It stamped each blooming rose-bud
with an exquisite freshness
( announcing – to announce) a new day
(to – for) YOU and ME. and I would lose the caps with ‘you/me’

love judy
xxx
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Thanks for reading , the suggestions and the heads up.
I intentionally repeated the (it)as a kind of emphasise. Know what I mean?

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

author comment

If only all people were willing to greet change as easily as they do a new day. I would consider changing hushed to hushing and maybe check over the punctuation mark placements. And buffered......I know the word perfectly describes what I think you intend to convey but for some reason it doesn't seem to fit this poem. Maybe calmed or oiled or some such? Just my thoughts on this worthy poem..............stan

Thanks for the suggestions . I 'm not sure about hushing as all is stated in s past but sure i liked calmed better. Thank you

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

author comment

I went there and this is so evocative. Thank you

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