Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Green Gold

Like a seed
You are so darn tough
On the outside

I’d like to see
What happens
If you burst forth

From the soil
Of acceptance
And warmth

What unravels
From your beautiful insides

Become verdant
Like green gold

Your nature's
Perfect contribution

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Editing stage: 


Excellent, Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

thank you

author comment

all our grass while 'tis green
becomes gold
unless you meant yellow
ere it once again becomes cold

thanks lovedly

author comment

There I was just reading along enjoying this then came next to last line......i hate that typos bother me so much, maybe because I make so many lol. But anyhoo it should be : you're nature's. But I liked it since I took trouble to comment.....stan

good catch. fixed. thanks Stan.

author comment

but in truth not sure I totally get it (I guess another another word is "understand".) There are many things it could be, not so much a person to me as exploding from the inside kinda removes anything in the animal kingdom, as our insides, our guts, are not to me so "beautiful" or green gold like. So I'm not sure what it is, but in this case not sure it matters, unless you intended for me the reader to grasp something specific...


I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

I changed the word explode to unravel. I think that makes more sense of the poem

author comment

I love this poem perhaps because I view people and all life the way I view nature's renewal of spring when it is birthing in the richest green, more valuable than gold.
Your poem was a pleasure to read. Thank you

Thank you!

author comment
(c) No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.