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the Good, the Bad, and the Lovely

she can be broke sometimes
but when she's good she's great
she switched up my realities
and broke the garden gate

caged in like an animal
she broke out like a storm
polite enough to say goodbye
though she never met the norm

some things aren't understandable
like her pain at its worst
i'm waiting for the day when she screams
man, that fucking HURT!

i never can get anything
how does she deal with me?
i know i get annoying
barking up everyone's tree

when my world caves in around me
and i'm trapped on the inside
she'll fly me out with melodies
and be my place to hide

though all my points seem pointless
she knows i love her so
and this mushball needs her hugging
don't you ever let me go.

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i kinda had to wing it since this page was ripped out of my notebook and given away :) i had to listen to the song i wrote it to about a million times, but i got it! changed the fifth stanza but it's basically the same.
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I don't know if you remember me, but we met one time on "Chat". It was very nice talking with you. Good song lyrics! I have a suggestion for it.

In posting, you might want to tell us that it is lyrics by putting it in the title section, for example: .the Good, the Bad, and the Lovely (lyrics) that effects the cadence in how it is read.

I especially enjoyed this verse:

though all my points seem pointless
she knows i love her so
and this mushball needs her hugging
don't you ever let me go.

always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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it's not even a song; i wrote it while listening to "your gaurdian angel" by the red jumpsuit apparatus! maybe i'll make it a song though. and of course i remember! thanks for stopping by.
always,
mag

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thanks!
always,
mag

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