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GoinGoing,Gone

Submitted by China Blue on Sun, 2012-05-13 18:57

Going , Going, Gone

Going is the present
fading into the past

Going is the past
fading into the present

Thought rides the high winds
Being tossed and thrown into both

Gone is the future
It no longer lives

It's diabolical laughter
ringing through my fears

Gone the reality
of unending dream

Ghostly images paled by light
returning only in the dead of night

Taunting, haunting going on
tempting me to do what is wrong

going going going
Till I'm gone

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Candlewitch

Mon, 2012-05-14 11:45

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On a second reading of this surreal piece, I like these lines best:

Ghostly images paled by light
returning only in the dead of night

Taunting, haunting going on
tempting me to do what is wrong

Your poem is definitely inspirational to my imagination! I'll see what I can come up with!

always, eddy (& cat)

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MDT

Mon, 2012-05-14 16:06

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I liked this one especially because to me it talks about time how everything comes and goes..change is constant...we come we go :)

Peace love and harmony light the path we must take. - MDT

China Blue

Mon, 2012-05-14 16:20

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Thank you it is interesting to see the interpretaion you have of this . It is quite different from what I had in mind when I wrote it
thanks for the read

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

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