Welcome!
I great first post, enjoyed following your train of thought.
Well constructed and interesting enough to hold the readers attention.
My favorite lines:
"They've shown me how
potently they can write
about the unseen,
about feelings deeply hidden,
and they've never failed
to draw fresh images
sometimes fetched from the Hell,
and others from Eden."

Because the extreme is so true.
Eddie
...

What a lovely surprise, welcome to Neopoet.
Your first piece here is as usual lovely, you will find many workshops here and the best training for writing anywhere on the net.
May your stay with us be as a summer breeze,
Yours Ian.T (Yenti and Sparrow)

Once again, welcome to Neopoet! An excellent first poem. I liked the same lines as Eddie pointed out.

I hsve no suggestions, just appreciation for the work.

always, Cat

I love the way your ink is personified,
free ink...and you have me guessing( artist so ink is expensive:) )

I also liked the way you explore your own mind
as if you were on the outside of yourself,
that's clumsily said by me, but you know what I mean.

You use an unusual manner of word placement, that makes us look more intently.
Interesting first poem for us here, welcome from me too.

Ann/Nordic cloud
in Norway.

Yes Rula...you have the right words chosen to express your feelings..sentiments and emotions...through those drops of ink...a nice title and approach too..i liked it...

just a couple of suggestions

firstly, reverse syntax causes me to pause
'Free drops of ink
have forth called my
my inner poet'
would read bertter (imho i stress) as
'Free drops of ink
have called forth my
my inner poet'

and, too
' have I the right
words chosen?
to me (even though i see you are trying to keep rhyme)
'have i chosen
the right words?'
.
and then also
'They've sweetened the dreams
once by nightmares been stolen' - i'd drop the 'been'
also
'sometimes fetched from the Hell' (i'd lose the 'the')

just me
a very imaginative write
well done
love judy

WELCOME!! Now I can read you at 2 places. If you have any questions about site feel free to ask me or any member. The main suggestion I would give on your poem is to consider breaking it into stanzas..........stan

I noticed that you have put this into Stanzas where it reads a lot easier, one thing I always seem to not think is correct is to start with AND as in:-
.
And always left my
mind thinking ,
oh my!
Have I the right
words chosen?
.
I would love to see "Always leaving my mind thinking" as aposed to the "and" bit.
Take care and always walk in the sunshine though the shadows are sometimes long, Yours Ian.T

and here you are! I am so terribly sorry it took me so long to get back. My schedule is settling down. At least I know what my schedule is and have now incorporated some breaks between jobs.
Ah, what can I say. I know... I have your next exercise and will send it post haste. I am not giving up on our game. My verse will also arrive quickly and we should be able to produce something to post very soon.

I think this is your first post here at NeoPoet and I thought it rather apropos. Also, (and this was very pleasing) I noticed no typographicals. Everything was intended.
Marvelous.
Judy and Mark's comments about your word placement are astute. What you wrote is correct, but dated in its usage. Since I love old ways of talking and writing, I would probably leave them as is. They gave no grief to my ancient ear, but I understand their suggestions (be careful of both of those poets... Mark is assuredly strange, but he's also one of the smartest blokes here and Judyanne, though new here, is a bit like you. She writes incredibly emotional poetry without giving it much thought at the first writing. Like you, she does not know where her talents lie, but they are considerable and I'm not going to be the one to tell her).

As far as Stan's claim that I wrote free verse... well... he's a loquaciously lying lizard. A left leaning louse of the lowest level... and besides... he made Jess command me do it knowing I can't say no to The Elf (you'll meet him soon, he's the one who will insult you like Jeffrey Gibson and NOT hurt your feelings).
I'm going to play in your posts when I come to the computer today, so I'll see you later on.
By the way, I wouldn't have changed anything in the poem.
wesley

I do not like poetic introspection.
Let's write for everyone! Not just other poets.
Otherwise all above comments, especially Judyanne's and Wesleys are all that need to be said.

I think that we do write for everyone but the number of people that read our words well that is to be a great question of the ages.
How many people as a percentage go to see a picture in a gallery or read a book at the most it is a Million out of seven thousand millions.
Well if one in that seven thousand million reads our words and finds something of interest in them then we have succeeded.
Here on this site at least we have some of the best, to direct our errors and tidy our words and in doing so they read the whole thing and to critique that is where our words mean something to someone and we can smile..
Yours Ian.T

PS:- If we should have an Elf of the Southern Hemisphere read our words and give us good comments we should celebrate and be Happy LOL

You are that lucky poet who speaks aloud without any inhibitions

you are the only one perhaps
on whose maiden poem
all Neopoet’s stalwarts have placed a comment.
I am just a miniature dwarf
but at times do dare
to my thoughts
frankly and utterly bare.

My experience so far has been
compose at free will
and odd guy will twist
and
good twill be
as you would have made a mark worthy of thee...
old language hurts a few years,
but they never do any one,
least of me ever disturb
I’m a maestro of original creativity,
call it poetry or prosaicity
I leave it to the readers’ plea.