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A FOOL IN THE RAIN
Leaves toss to shed the falling rain.
Try as they might they remain wet
while clouds above them drip and drain.
And the storm is not done yet.
The same drops smite my weathered hat
whose wide brim keeps my old neck dry.
But I grow damp in spite of that
like all who walk beneath gray sky.
The ground is soaked as is my staff
so I make my way most carefully
while nearby brooks fill up and laugh.
I guess that they're chuckling at me.
Can't really say that I blame them,
an old man limping in the rain
pants and boots soaked to the hem
while the deluge beats its wet refrain.
But at least the rain is warm
as befits a late spring day
and I know I'm not the norm
to venture into this wet fray.
Yet surgery approaches soon
and with it months of being bound.
No walking woods, hearing a loon.
Just the T.V. and house's sound.
So one more step, ignore the cost;
ignore that I'm getting wetter.
I'll watch as limbs are shaken, tossed
then return when knees and weather are better.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
I must be getting either senile or distracted to have forgotten poem's final stanza was on the next page of notebook! lol
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Comments
Rula
Fri, 2016-05-27 14:58
A bibliographical piece
Hello Stan,
I don't much agree with the title, as 'fool' isn't really the word that best describes our poet :)
Ps.There is an additional 'I' after the last line you need to drop.
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scribbler
Wed, 2016-06-01 17:58
Hi Rula
I have no Idea how that I got there but am thankful for your eagle I lol..............stan
author commentlovedly
Sat, 2016-05-28 16:50
gray or grey
Stan Neos best poet
perhaps
stay you may
and enjoy your hospitalization
composing each moment
its ecstasy as does Joe
then we all shall know
who is enjoying more
to be sure
knock not ur knees off
get them together
as you want all of us around you
to gather
now don't say
LOVED spare me
the bother!
stan your the Poet man
scribbler
Wed, 2016-06-01 17:59
Hi loved
Now in addition to knee replacements I need head reduction from such praise lol. Thanks for dropping by...........stan
author commentlovedly
Thu, 2016-06-02 09:23
ru saying
u need a haircut
go ahead its only 50 dollars
Keith Logan
Sun, 2016-05-29 23:53
Reflections
Your poem brought to mind my own double bypass operation. I was climbing a bing in the early morning five days later, to enjoy the dawning of a new day. I wrote a poem about the surgery called simply operation, indeed I am sure I shared it here recently. I wrote another about that sunrise. I may share that also.
PS: I have always enjoyed walking in the rain.
Keith Logan
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scribbler
Wed, 2016-06-01 18:03
Hello Keith
I also enjoy a walk in the rain but I have little enough time before surgery that I'm not able to be picky about the type rain lol. I'm told each surgery will entail a min. 2 month recovery period. $ months when I can hardly spare a week with all that's going on. My father had bypass surgery twice in his life and I know that it's no picnic........stan
author commentKeith Logan
Fri, 2016-06-03 03:05
Me too
I was also told about that mythical recovery period, methinks its just the medical profession preparing people for a worst case senario. I'll repeat, I was climbing a bing some 40/50 feet high around 5 am some 5 days later. My period of being housebound was the many months I waited before the operation.
Keith Logan
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scribbler
Fri, 2016-06-03 17:29
hi
My youngest son went through two hip replacements and the 2 month recovery time was a bit optimistic if anything. And I've been told knees are worse than hips. But maybe I'll be the exception and be back climbing ladders and deer stands in less than month lol.........stan
author commentKeith Logan
Sat, 2016-06-04 06:03
Well
I've also had both my knees replaced. Once again recovery was far faster than I was advised. Maybe some folk simply have a faster recovery rate than others. 'Twood be a strange world indeed if everyone was the same.
Keith Logan
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scribbler
Sat, 2016-06-04 08:55
Hopefully my recovery time will mimic your.
Lord knows I can't spare the 4-6 months I'm being told to prepare for........stan
author commentmand
Fri, 2016-06-03 06:45
HI Stan
Making the most of life before your op. :) You'll be back on your feet before you know it.
Great poem :)
Love to you and yours
Mand xxx
scribbler
Fri, 2016-06-03 17:32
Hi Mandy
It looks like about 8-10 weeks before I can take time for first surgery. Depends on whether my will power can over come the pain for that long. It's been so long since I Haven't hurt that I won't know how to act without it............stan PS as always thanks for dropping by
author commentKeith Logan
Sat, 2016-06-04 13:30
Euphoria
I think can be forgiven.
Keith Logan
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Candlewitch
Wed, 2024-02-21 09:15
Dear Scribbler,
You must not get so distracted that you forget your hat or to come back in out of the rain! It is a very good last stanza.
*many hugs, Cat
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scribbler
Wed, 2024-02-21 22:08
Hi Cat
I'm always surprised when an edit brings additional comment lol. Thanks for the visit. And don't worry I have a special hat I wear only in the rain and haven't forgotten to return to cozy cabin yet. Glad you like the last stanza......I think (could it be because it was the end of this poem?) lol
author commentWilliam Lynn
Wed, 2024-02-21 22:14
Hello Scribbler.
Hello Scribbler.
If a fool you be then count me in. Having been the recipient of two knees and a hip, I'd gladly walk with you in the rain and whomever might call us fools be damned.
Thanks for sharing. - Will
scribbler
Sun, 2024-03-03 22:02
Hello
Your having had both hip and knees replace you can tell me which was worse hip or knees? appreciate your dropping by
author commentCandlewitch
Thu, 2024-03-07 11:04
knees!
were the worst!
*hugs, Cat
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scribbler
Thu, 2024-03-07 12:19
I
was not aware you had endured both. My doc told me knees were the worst of the two but I'm not sure how he's know lol
author commentCandlewitch
Thu, 2024-03-07 14:10
Dear Stan,
we have a misunderstanding, it is my fault: I thought you asked which was worse; Knees or shoulders... I have not yet had my hips done yet. sorry for the confusion :( He probably heard it from his patients or has a family member who has had the surgeries (?)
*hugs, Cat
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scribbler
Fri, 2024-03-08 09:00
No Problem.
I'm pleased you've not had to endure both
author commentCandlewitch
Fri, 2024-03-08 09:26
Been lucky...
so far. Steven needs his hips done but I cannot be left alone for three days. We are trying to figure out what to do about me. Maybe a nurse or a friend?
*hugs, Cat
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scribbler
Fri, 2024-03-08 14:20
Alas
Wisconsin is too far plus Susan might get suspicious lol
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