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There are too many stoney fields
which plows will never again touch.
They bear those stones like ancient shields,
these glades are not frequented much.

Perhaps the last crop planted there
was planted far too deep.
Though each was spaded with great care,
above the surface sprouts don't peep.

The soil here is deep and dark
made fertile by too many souls
spaced neatly as if in some park
in ordered rows across the knolls.

All the stones are purest white
neatly etched with names and dates
of those proud men who fought the fight
and in war found their final fates.

There are too many stoney fields...........

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Maybe the rhythm would be improved by changing, in verse 2, "although" to "though" and so losing a syllable. Apart from that it is a powerful, honest, thought-provoking anti-war poem. Well done.



Thank you. I'm always reviewing and editing stuff so I'll keep that idea of changing although to though in mind. I know that I tend to use a "poetic" voice when writing and it sometimes leads me astray. I appreciate you thought and time............stan

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No need to think about it , you're right lol. So off to the edit.......stan

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This is good even if there is anything wrong, I will not reside in those fields of stone, as I am only here because of their harvest, I feel the tears of the greener fields they let us sow, and the many harvests since,
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

We all owe a great deal to those who rest in those stone adorned fields............stan

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I agree with our friends, this is a good write with an anti-war theme. You have described it in a beautiful manner. Well done.


Thank you. I keep trying off and on to write "the" poem about the resting places of heroes.....I'll keep trying. Appreciate your kind comment...........stan

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you touch all denomination of land-mark but i would have loved to see a brutal war from this fight explained maybe in metaphors how brutal to human existence is, yours truly stan

I seldom write actual war poems because I like to write from personal experience and have been fortunate in never having gone to war. But I have tried a few war poems based on how I imagine it must be like. "Those Men","The Spoils", "Inheritors and Benefactors"(and experimental form dealing with aftermath of nuclear war) And "Homecoming". I appreciate your taking time to drop by..........stan

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Commented on this one over on the other site and so I will say no more here than I did there. There are indeed too many fallow fields, and too many more to come I would suspect!

I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on this one on 2 different sites...........stan

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Totally agree, and you have captured the scene well with this poem. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Sorry for late reply. Only reason I can think of is your comment was added while my comp was down. Thank you for your supportive words.........stab

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