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Fairy Tales Remembered

Only in fairy tales are we able to see
all of the characters we are able to be.

Some days the pauper, some days the queen
others, the princess, sometimes the king.

But when we are nasty and ever so mean
the role of the troll can often be seen.

Whatever our mood, whatever our need
there is always an appropriate story to read.

Without tiny stories and beautiful dreams
we have no way to muffle life’s screams.

The beauty of fairy tales should never be lost
there is no possible way to repay the cost.

Always remember, although words all they be
each has his stories through which he can see.

Each has a harbor, a safe place, a nook
all neatly portrayed in some fairytale book.

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Fairy Tales Remembered" effectively employs the metaphor of fairy tale characters to explore the range of human emotions and experiences. This metaphor is maintained throughout the poem, providing a cohesive structure and a clear thematic focus.

However, the poem could benefit from more specific imagery and concrete details. For instance, instead of stating "some days the pauper, some days the queen," the poem could describe specific actions or situations that embody these roles. This would make the metaphor more vivid and engaging for the reader.

The rhyme scheme of the poem is generally consistent, which contributes to the poem's rhythm and flow. However, the rhyme in the second last stanza ("all they be" and "he can see") is not as strong as in the other stanzas. Revising this stanza to include a more exact rhyme could improve the poem's musicality.

The poem's message about the importance and power of stories is clear and effectively communicated. However, the phrase "there is no possible way to repay the cost" is somewhat ambiguous. Clarifying what "the cost" refers to could make the poem's message more impactful.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more varied sentence structure. Most lines begin with "some days," "whatever," or "always remember." Introducing more variety in sentence structure could make the poem more dynamic and engaging.

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Thank you very much for your generous comments. I will keep on trying different poems and forms.I also really enjoy reading our other members works

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What a beautiful poem. The images that this poem conveys strike us deeply with a velvet hand leaving us with memories that undoubtedly have and will last! You truly possess a gift!

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