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Eulogy

Submitted by Oladosu Michael... on Mon, 2020-08-03 01:04

I come from a world,
where mountains and valleys
hold their grounds.
I am the talking drum,
voice of the voiceless.
I am the bridge that connects
art with the heart.
I am the diamond in the rough.
I draw feelings 'cos I'm skilled with pencils
I write right, base on literature's rite.
I wrap my feelings in beat.
I act art in all ways
I act always.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Dandini

Sat, 2021-01-23 13:38

Dandini's picture

I found this to be very well written. My only suggestion would be to get rid of the abbreviation 'cos, 4 lines from the bottom as it's too informal. Why not "since" or "as" or even a semi-colon???

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