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DREAM NOT OF DEATH

I find many darker poets surfacing poor stamina to face adversity take not to heart of that you wouldn't know nor care to
be the elixir of romance promote love and dance see in my dream last night she came running hugged me tight she was always in broad daylight wanted to be someone's wife maybe mine
She left after a long night and smiled dripped
how I wish you were mine

My eyes wide open by now fully awake
she flies as does a Queenie honey bee...

Will come again another night
will wait for me thee

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Read it as if you were SHE
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Hi Lovedly! I really enjoyed the story and rollercoasters of emotions it created. The last two lines of the poem really did resonate and perfectly tied up the piece with an ongoing emotion many feel in life: longing. Just a heads up… the first line of your poem is a bit unorthodox and I did have to read it a few times. My suggestion would be to format the first stanza of your poem like the last two as it makes it clearer for the reader. As always… your poems are very intriguing! Nice work!

Tomorrow I shall do I was too exhausted so left it And the DREAM continues part 2 All is abs imaginary hence you find intriguing I am basically a ROMANCIO
poet is just perchance
to self image enhance
off the cuff kind...
for Years only
FREELANCE
as I to no ones tunes
dance

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