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Divine Introspection

Submitted by Alan Garfoot on Fri, 2023-07-14 01:33

As the essences of Chi align the Phrana energies emerge,
Then the Aura manifests as the souls Chakras converge,
And as our will gazes introspectively at its true nature,
The spirit connects skywards towards the infinite creator.

Then as Gaia's Lay-Line forces glow from below to above,
They resonate in our higher self the feelings of true love,
And as the high-sun illuminates your spirit in its golden beams,
Your higher power is reconnected to your hopes and your dreams.

Healed and empowered by the glory of living your inspirations,
As all true souls are borne of the energy and essence of creation,
For the 'DMT' and 'Pineal Gland' 'Soul Nexus' reveals our past lives,
Then connecting the higher self energies to the soul matrix inside.

Then through interstellar ascension we connect to the solar soul,
Harmonising the vibration of our essence to the macro-cosmic whole,
The infinite sentient wavelength captured in soul-glow spectrum,
A split-second of spiritual perfection in a moment of divine introspection.

Style / type:

Free verse

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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

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Editing stage:

Editing - draft

Contest:

July 2023 New Member Contest

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

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neopoet

Fri, 2023-07-14 07:33

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Divine Introspection" explores themes of spirituality, energy, and self-reflection. The language used is rich in metaphysical concepts and imagery. Here are some suggestions for further refining and strengthening the poem:

1. Clarity and Coherence: While the poem contains a wealth of metaphysical ideas, it could benefit from clearer connections between these concepts. Consider revisiting the structure and organization of the poem to ensure a smoother flow of ideas. This will help readers follow the progression of thought more easily.

2. Use of Metaphors: Metaphors can be powerful tools for conveying abstract ideas. Consider incorporating more vivid and evocative metaphors to enhance the imagery and engage the reader's senses. This will make the poem more immersive and memorable.

3. Consistency in Tone: The poem shifts between a more abstract, philosophical tone and a more personal, introspective tone. Strive for consistency in the overall tone and voice to maintain a cohesive atmosphere throughout the poem.

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Lavender

Fri, 2023-07-14 13:12