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To Dawn

Submitted by slybard on Mon, 2012-02-06 17:03

Dawn- slayer of pretense, usher of youth-
you, born anew as passing season,
wield those luminous swords, sharp and uncouth,
and absolve ignorance of reason.
Are you not the mother of sweet knowledge?

Dawn – light of tunnels, well of Saharas-
You, of divine hue, alive in Dark’s death
when all that’s fair is stripped of myrrhs
And Life’s Eden is, fast as youth, but heath.
Are you not the promise that Hope is nigh?

—Mini-anthology: Hepatica—

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loved

Mon, 2012-02-06 20:52

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You have the blood of a great poet ,
flowing through your veins...

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Barbara Writes

Mon, 2012-02-06 23:41

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Makes one meditate

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weirdelf

Fri, 2012-02-10 18:10

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this still feels fresh and original.

wield those luminous swords, sharp [and] uncouth, [could you use another form of caesura to improve scansion and avoid repeated 'and'?]
and absolve ignorance of reason.

And Life’s Eden is, fast as youth, but heath. [do you mean health? heath seems incongruous]

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