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In Concert
Deep in the stacks of notes and old photos
Ones marked important and shuffled aside
I keep an old file of stories and pictures
In a shoebox all careworn by passage of time
Not a real box, it’s the figurative kind
In a well hidden, guarded, corner of mind
Store all of my greatest memories there
So when I come visit the image is clear
Inside there’s a picture (truth be told there’s a lot)
They’re hazy old Polaroids and lazy snapshots
But I’ve got a favorite, I keep it on top
Protect it from loss when I’m cleaning up shop
The subjects, a young man and younger girl still
Anxiously waiting to gather their fill
The first sights of long hair and colored balloons
Sounds just like a carnival, smells like one too
A guy in a bright woven sweater of wool
Getting hassled for cannabis (which sells like hot cakes)
The cops give a warning and everything’s cool
They smile and he thanks them for getting a break
Into the show to observe the mystique
The crowd as diverse as the visions they seek
All funneling into a crumbling rink
The new one being built right beside it I think
A couple concessions, something to eat
An overpriced t-shirt you’ll hold at your seat
Get to your section and flow through the crowd
Their joy and their happiness broadcast out loud
Sit for a second and gather yourself
Take it all in, collect all the wealth
Speculations concerning the opening tune
“They played that on Friday, I think it’s too soon.”
Fashionably late, the house lights go down
The sold out arena erupts with a roar
Under a state of the art lighting rig
An aging guitarist stands draped in his flaws
A minute of tuning, a noodle or two
A word with the others about what to do
They nod to each other, decision’s been made
A ghostly conductor now starts the parade
My soul just feels lighter and seeks every note
Vibrations encircle me just like a moat
Shielding the darkness, reflecting the light
“In the strangest of places if you look at it right”
Let’s make this a habit, I’m certainly hooked
Like a beautiful freak show, you can’t help but look
It’s not just the music I love the whole thing
The sights and the people just make my heart sing
I’m still taking pictures, it’s been 30 years
Millions of smiles and miles and tears
When I see a show and I feel like it rocked
I snap a few photos to add to my box
I just put a new one on top of the stack
That’s what compelled me to take a look back
When seeing my favorites, found this to be true
The best photographs all contain me and you.
Comments
Geezer
Sun, 2022-07-03 09:21
This one is all...
that I hoped it would be! I had doubts after the first couple of stanzas, but went back and started over; hoping that I could find the rhythm and the beat. Nope, just when I had it, it slipped away! Then I discovered the magic of it! I went blind with my
out-loud voice and heard it with the music of my eyes! That's when it all came together; like a carnival of musical sights!
Thank you for this one! It made my morning. ~ Geez.
. P.S. After seeing with my eyes, I started hearing with my ears, and I was flabbergasted at how it took me so long to get the rhythm right! But now I can't un-see or hear it! Truly amazing!
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Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-07-03 09:33
dear Tim,
I took the poem for a few walks around the block, too! enjoyed the read, but these lines intrigued me. could you elucidate?
A minute of tuning, a noodle or two
A word with the others about what to do
They nod to each other, decision’s been made
A ghostly conductor now starts the parade
thank you, Cat
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Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2022-07-03 14:31
Yes
Familiarity with The Grateful Dead is key here. See, they played over 2500 concerts before Jerry Garcia died and no concert ever had the same list of songs. They created something new and different every night. So they’d often come out and just kinda play little riffs to each other and talk about what song they’d start with. They never knew what songs they’d play any given night (except if they already played it recently it was probably not gonna be repeated for a few shows). Many times without really counting in, they’d just let the first notes of the first song flow right out of the free form notes (noodling) they were doing.
Tim
RoseBlack
Mon, 2022-07-04 17:43
This was fantastic
I am an avid music fan and concert goer. My band is Steppenwolf and I have followed them all over throughout the years. Each time has been a treat, even though I have heard the stories and songs over and over. Always felt like I was seeing them for the first time. Many photos imprinted in my mind as well as in my album. Even though the band has long retired, the memories are still fresh. Great write!
~RoseBlack~