The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem effectively conveys the emotional turmoil experienced by someone with bipolar disorder and how it impacts their relationships. The narrative structure and progression of events provide a clear and engaging storyline for the reader to follow. However, there are areas where the poem could be improved to enhance its overall impact.

1. Imagery and figurative language: The poem relies heavily on direct statements and descriptions of feelings. Incorporating more imagery and figurative language could help create a more vivid and immersive experience for the reader. For example, instead of saying "I hated you," consider using a metaphor or simile to convey the intensity of the emotion.

2. Line breaks and punctuation: The poem's structure and punctuation could be refined to improve its flow and rhythm. Consider experimenting with enjambment or varying line lengths to create a more dynamic reading experience. Additionally, some lines could benefit from punctuation to clarify the intended pauses and breaks in the narrative.

3. Show, don't tell: In some instances, the poem tells the reader how the speaker feels rather than showing it through actions or descriptions. For example, instead of stating "I was scared you would hate me forever," consider describing the speaker's actions or thoughts that demonstrate this fear.

4. Consistency in tone: While the poem effectively conveys the emotional journey of the speaker, the tone occasionally shifts in a way that may be jarring for the reader. For example, the line "It's amazing what doctors can do" introduces a more casual tone that contrasts with the rest of the poem. Consider revising such lines to maintain a consistent tone throughout.

By addressing these points, the poem can become a more powerful and engaging exploration of the impact of bipolar disorder on relationships and the process of healing and rebuilding.

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the rules, as much as I would like to. But this is a great poem anyhow! I am sure that anyone reading this will say the same. Take a comfort in that, please! This is as good as any poem as I have read in the last week. This subject is something that needs to be recognized and spoken about. Your excellent characterization of the matter is superb. I see the love and hopefulness in every line. The title is good, there is good, plain language that doesn't confuse readers and the theme is great!
This piece went from the hopelessness of a lost love to an ultimate renewal of hope, with a smoothness that is evident.
This is a great poem. The minimal punctuation is good and doesn't impede the work at all. ~ Geezer.
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I agree with Geezer wholeheartedly on this poem. I also have had mental health issues and I've been 13yrs this year episode free.

Medication and self love and learning to love yourself again isn't an easy road to travel take it from someone farther down the road. Life does become easier. I'm so happy for you. Hold him close he's a good one.

This is a brilliant poem. Kudos.

Kind Regards

Seren/Jayne (hugs)

noticed, the rules have been changed! We will now consider poems that are somewhat longer than the previous allowance.
However, I urge you and others to please keep your poems within a reasonable length, so as not to task our judges too much.
[Some of our contests have many entries and entail a lot of reading]. There will still be limits on some contests that will not be
changed under any circumstances and when this occurs, you will be informed. Thank you for a great poem and congratulations on a win! ~ Geezer.
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This is sacred ground for me I don't feel comfortable sharing half of what I want to. Congratulations
on the win, you deserve it.

This poem of love and loss is so close to what I experienced about six months ago. After something hurtful my husband said to me, he slammed the door in my face. In that moment, I fell out of love with him... It was the strangest feeling, being empty. like nothing I have ever felt before. I had to re-fall in love with him. He was patient with me and we are better than what we were. I am the one on medication for mental health. Trazadone, abilify, and methylphenidate are the meds that keep my life on track, and Neopoet!

I like your title,it is a fantastic poem. I am glad to know that there is someone else out there who has experienced this. I usually choose my favorite lines from a poem to quote back to the poet. In this case I love the whole poem as it is relevant. I am glad you have posted it!

*Hugs, Cat