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To Be Sad
Sometimes I want to be sad
for only one day.
Not that I'm sad or stressed.
I just want to feel
for only a day.
I'm really sick of this emotional rest.
I'm so used to feeling so drained
and so tired.
That laughter and tears are alien.
Sometimes I want to be sad
for one day.
So that one day I won't be depressed.
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Rosewood Apothecary
Fri, 2022-12-30 05:42
Welcome
Welcome to Neopoet. I like the format of this poem. I can relate to these feelings on a personal level and I also use writing as a release. I hope the others will be along soon to offer support and welcome you. We have a pretty tightly knit community here and we welcome new members very openly.
I wouldn’t change a thing with this. It’s well organized which is another benefit of writing; we get to see our thoughts and sometimes we see the err in them.
Healing energy,
Tim
Lavender
Fri, 2022-12-30 13:05
To Be Sad
Greetings, Katy,
I read in your profile that you are a big fan of the weird and wonderful, and the moon. Amen to you! This poem reminds me of the movie "Inside Out" about all the emotions carried within us, helping us to survive and thrive. One of the biggest lessons I learned from the movie is that sadness has a vital role in our overall health, and joy and happiness don't come to fruition until sadness is acknowledged, has its turn, and is addressed. It plays a positive role in moving forward. It is definitely draining as your poem states so well, to have emotional rest preventing us from moving on. If this is truly about you, I hope tears and laughter aren't alien to you much longer. I look forward to reading more from you.
Welcome to Neopoet,
Lavender
Geezer
Sat, 2023-02-18 00:31
I think I know...
what you are feeling. I sometimes want to set a certain mood for writing, and I will listen to a certain type of music. If I want sad, I play Blues, faster but lighter, maybe something else. At any rate, I can set the mood somewhat. I like the premise of wanting to feel something and being too drained. Good story, good work. ~ Geezer.
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