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AUTUMN IS REAL FUN

Autumn arrives again
trees wind stripped-nudity
gals dance about a pole
shed their clothes like lifeless leaves
they show all lay beneath skin
no fruits dangling
apples and bananas
no breasts
no busts
all cast
as autumn arrived today

oldies too walk about in autumn
like me and you
dance about in the park
semi nude no hat

if trees can show
can't they
all ask me
you can't simulate trees
many autumns all have seen
naked like multi colored autumn leaves

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

not shred. Unless you are implying that the wind has ripped their clothes off! ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
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they have a few free minutes?

shed
will correct Gee

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still no one read it LOL
LOVEDLY IS NOW OLD

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corrected! Sometimes we just don't get read! I read it! ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

comparing the shedding of leaves and clothes works well here.

kindness for the read

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