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Alter ego C. Wilde Night in the life

Staring across the tension tight space
separates
me from the door
wondering how fast a draw
how many shots
will I make it across the floor
A maniac is laughing
in the bathroom
advising in a pitched bozo voice
"It's time to grow up kids"
gotta expect that from a lunatic
yeah just grow up and quit......
sounds quite a bit
like a wife I had
and painful slow suicide
waiting gets intense
cracking like an electric charge
now poised, frozen
on the edge of a trance
long, dark and black
the moment tightly wound
the feeling tightly wrapped
the question of this space and time
when will the tuning go too far
and cause the string to snap
killing off the parrot in the corner
and making everybody laugh

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My alter ego Christian Wilde is the name I used when I fronted bands, a mix of Fletcher Christian from Mutiny on the Bounty and Oscar Wilde. Also a bit of a dig at myself being a Ministers son. The Poem is from a memory I had sitting back stage at a local theater with the headlining band, it was one of those nights
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I like the name! I am thinking that there is meaning to it and it gives me ideas about who you are.
An error I spotted: "When will the tuning go [too] far"...
~Geezer.
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Thanks for pointing it out I'll correct it

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an interesting poem with great potential. maybe it would help to give us a little history of your character in the last few words box. what is his occupation? is he a gun-hand?

*hugs, Cat
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The gun was being waved around by a member of one of the other bands, Christian is/was a singer

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thank you for the added information. it helped a lot!

*hugs, Cat

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This is an amazing write. did you enter ii in this months contest if not I would

Chrys

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I did enter it

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